Please proofread this paragraph [Edited]

Question

Thanks you so much to those who helped me

• I voted because I liked the story. Too newbi to help proof. - Jim Nov 8, 2009

Answer 1

que era el babé = bebé

los niños creen que los Reyes Magos los dan a ellos = you need to take out the 'los niños, "creen que los...."

These should get you started and I will look at it again in a bit!

Very goo draft!! Your Spanish is good

Answer 2

Es después de los 12 días de la Navidad.

Hoy día, niños reciben regalos de sus padres

Sin embargo, los niños creen que los Reyes Magos se los dan a ellos.

I don't understand why you keep switching back and forth between the impersonal and using ellos (los niños).

Answer 3

Ellos fueron el oro, la mirra y el incienso.

Why not say "Estos eran oro, mirra, e incienso" I think this sound better than "ellos" which could be confused with "los Reyes Magos."

or: "con tres regalos: oro, mirra e incienso."

Also, take out the "ellos" when referring to the children; simply conjugate the verb.

I am not always correct, but I am close. Somebody will correct me if I am wrong!