Please proofread this paragraph [Edited]
Thanks you so much to those who helped me 
3 Answers
que era el babé = bebé
los niños creen que los Reyes Magos los dan a ellos = you need to take out the 'los niños, "creen que los...."
These should get you started and I will look at it again in a bit!
Very goo draft!! Your Spanish is good
Es después de los 12 días de la Navidad.
Hoy día, niños reciben regalos de sus padres
Sin embargo, los niños creen que los Reyes Magos se los dan a ellos.
I don't understand why you keep switching back and forth between the impersonal and using ellos (los niños).
Ellos fueron el oro, la mirra y el incienso.
Why not say "Estos eran oro, mirra, e incienso" I think this sound better than "ellos" which could be confused with "los Reyes Magos."
or: "con tres regalos: oro, mirra e incienso."
Also, take out the "ellos" when referring to the children; simply conjugate the verb.
I am not always correct, but I am close. Somebody will correct me if I am wrong!
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