Endless Tao text
I like to thank before hand all those who have helped with the Tao writings I'm working on, and also the silent ones that just like to watch. We all enjoy in our own way doing this kind of thing, or we wouldn't be here.(I've just said that 'cause I feel guilty of posting so many threads). 
Another consideration of the efforts we make comes from a global perspective'a glimpse at this position reveals a wealth of discoveries made by scientific and medical research, which has greatly alleviated much of mankind's many burdens.
Equally benefiting, but at an individual level, receiving Tao broadens our capacity to contribute to our world in a more productive way'since the Teachings of Tao hold the Wisdom to properly set the building blocks that construct a healthier society.
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Of course you have helped me a lot...I'm merging some of your text with the original...it's just that I can't completely adjust to the short sentence format that you so gracefully master...here's an example:
Let us now briefly consider the results of man's efforts to improve conditions from a global perspective'at a glimpse this position reveals a wealth of discoveries made by scientific and medical research, much of which has greatly alleviated mankind's many burdens.
Equally benefiting is the fact that Tao broadens our individual capacity to make personal contributions to the world we live in, since the Teachings of Tao hold the Wisdom to properly set the building blocks that construct a healthier society.
woajiaorobert:
It pleases me of course that you may find some agreement with the use of shorter sentences. However, if you adopt such a style, it may show in your overall work that there has been a style change. Only you can judge that. Here is your own work with only small changes to acheive shorter sentences. I think your intent is preserved in this suggestion. As ever, this is only an example. It may be no better than your original work.
Let us briefly consider the result of human efforts to improve conditions on a global basis. A glimpse at this position reveals a wealth of discoveries made by scientific and medical research. Many of these discoveries have greatly alleviated mankind's many burdens.
Equally benefiting is the fact that Tao broadens our individual capacity to make personal contributions to the world we live in. The Teachings of Tao hold the Wisdom to properly set the building blocks that construct a healthier society.
Best regards
Moe
woajiaorobert:
Thanks for sharing that larger work and context. You must know by now that I wish to you every success you hope for with your document. If I've been any help at all, that is my reward. I'll continue to watch and comment where I think my observations might be helpful to you.
Best personal regards,
Moe.
Very nice Moe, only at the end I felt compelled to change one word. I don't know if you would agree.
The Teachings of Tao contain the Wisdom that helps to set the building blocks needed for the solid foundation of a healthy society.
Even though I used construction myself, I think here it might be a little different.
The idea I'm trying to convey at the beginning of this presentation, is to successively name the sources making the 'effort? necessary, that would allow our world to transcend its present state through the Teachings of Tao. Effort is a key word here, so that the people can follow the sequence without losing perspective. You probably have a broader understanding now since you helped me yesterday with an earlier paragraph that talked about the effort being made by the introducer, and the ancestors, and so on?
Here I'll show the entire thing as I have written it so far?
Today is a very auspicious day for your spiritual evolution, since there is a Teaching that states that 'when the disciple is ready, the Teacher appears.? Not everyone is able to walk through to Temple doors to receive Tao, however you are all here today for this very purpose'but, how did you accomplish this'...who brought you to the Temple''Well'the fact that you are all here today is evidence of the effort you have made to receive Tao'it is actually a mutual effort made by you and your introducer'this achievement is the end product of an accumulation of merits, qualities and virtues, that you and your introducer have worked for, and it is what gives you today the privilege to receive Tao'nothing happens by chance, everything is the effect of a cause'everything that we do is a reflection of the consequences (karma) brought forth by our actions. Today's harvest is yesterday's sowing.
It was not mere coincidence that you have found the one that has brought you here today. You both have trodden similar paths, and the Tao of Nature has recognized the collective effort needed to serve its own Divine purpose. An analogous example is the effort that our parents and grandparents made in the past, which in most cases has resulted in improving the quality of life we all enjoy today?
Similarly when we receive Tao we are benefiting our descendants, providing them with the spiritual heritage that will make it easier for them to discover their own path to the Temple and receive Tao'Our ancestors also benefit when we receive Tao? According to Scripture when we receive Tao, the souls of our deceased relatives that have remained trapped in the underworld receive a White Lotus Flower. This allows them to attend the Teachings of the Grandmaster, Buda Di-Zang Gu-Fo so that they could eventually rise from their darkness and reach higher spheres of Light.
Another consideration of the efforts we make comes from a global perspective'a glimpse at this position reveals a wealth of discoveries made by scientific and medical research, which has greatly alleviated much of mankind's many burdens.
Equally benefiting, but at an individual level, receiving Tao broadens our capacity to contribute to our world in a more productive way'since the Teachings of Tao hold the Wisdom to properly set the building blocks that construct a healthier society.
Tao is a discipline that transforms us, transforms our environment, and benefits all those around us. But nothing could had been possible without the effort made by our Founding Teachers. It so happened that many years ago in Ancient China'
You ask difficult questions. I accept the challenge. Here is one attempt at a reply. Remember, I do not like long, compound run-on sentences. I have done a cruel hatchet job on your work and almost totally re-written it. Please forgive my transgression. Here is only one suggestion:
Consider briefly the result of humankind's efforts to improve conditions for itself. On a global basis we know there have been remarkable discoveries. Discoveries have been made by scientific, medical and technological research. The results of those discoveries have been applied in many different ways for the betterment and improvement of us all.
Tao is a comfortable fit with the discovery and application processes. Tao works at both an individual and group basis. Tao broadens our individual capacity to make personal contributions to the world we live in. On a group basis, Tao enhances the synergistic output of a group working together as a team.
The Teachings of Tao contain the Wisdom that helps to set the building blocks needed for the solid construction of a healthy society.
