Azucena scene 4
Azucena Scene 4 '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
'Azucena, el puerco se va a ahorcar si no tienes cuidado;
y ya sabes que pasará, tú vas a ganarte una buena paliza!?
"Azucena the pig will choke itself if you don't take more care;
then you know what will happen, your ass will be up in the air!"
El puerco estaba amarrado a un poste en un lodazal y tenía
el lazo enredado, estaba tirado gruñendo en el terreno lodo.
The pig was tied to a post in a wallow and had wrapped the lasso
around and around, was lying there grunting, in the muddy ground.
Todavía con el bebé bajo su brazo, se acerca al puerco
que le gruñe con un disgusto y aparente desesperación.
With the baby underarm still, she approaches the porker
that grunts at her in an apparent disgusted desperation.
Con el lodo saliendo entre los dedos de sus pies, se planta
en el lodazal, estirándose ? manteniendo un ojo en la bestia.
Sticky mud coming through her toes, she plants her bare feet
in the wallow, reaching out - warily eyeing the gross beast.
Desenredando el lazo varias vueltas, suelta al puerco que
gruñe otra vez de manera indecente, como un demonio gordo.
Unwrapping the cord several turns, she loosens the pig
which grunts again obscenely at her, like a fat demon.
El bebé vuela felizmente bajo su brazo; con sus ojos
abiertos, no llora, ni siquiera parece estar alarmado.
The baby along for the ride sails freely under her arm;
he is wide-eyed, not crying, not even alarmed seemingly.
La madre trae la canasta de las tortillas, el agua, la sal y el chile;
mueve los frijoles, mientras que el padre se va a bañar y a cambiarse.
The mother is bringing out the tortilla basket, water, salt and chili;
she stirs the beans, while the father had gone to bathe and to change.
Una vez que el puerco se ha calmado en su chicero,
el bebé empieza a llorar con gemidos estruendosos.
After the pig had been settled again in its muddy patch,
the baby starts up crying, letting out outrageous wails.
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6 Answers
Just a couple of suggestions:
y ya sabes que pasará, tú vas a ganarte una buena paliza!?
then you know what will happen, your ass will be up in the air!"
Then you know what will happen; you're gonna get yourself a whippin'.
I think that matches the register more closely.
El bebé vuela felizmente bajo su brazo; con sus ojos
abiertos, no llora, ni siquiera parece estar alarmado.
The baby along for the ride sails freely under her arm;
he is wide-eyed, not crying, not even alarmed seemingly.
The baby rides happily under her arm; his eyes open, he
doesn't cry, and doesn't even seem alarmed.
Azucena Scene 4 '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
'Azucena, ese puerco se va a ahorcar si no tienes cuidado;
y ya sabes que pasará, tú vas a ganarte una buena paliza!?
"Azucena, that pig will choke itself if you don't take more care;
you know what will happen; you're going to get yourself a whippin'.
El puerco estaba amarrado a un poste en un lodazal y tenía
el lazo enredado, estaba tirado gruñendo en el terreno lodo.
The pig was tied to a post in a wallow and had wrapped the lasso
around and around, was lying there grunting, in the muddy ground.
Todavía con el bebé bajo su brazo, se acerca al puerco
que le gruñe con un disgusto y aparente desesperación.
With the baby underarm still, she approaches the porker
that grunts at her in an apparent disgusted desperation.
Con el lodo saliendo entre los dedos de sus pies, se planta
en el lodazal, estirándose ? manteniendo un ojo en la bestia.
Sticky mud coming through her toes, she plants her bare feet
in the wallow, reaching out - maintaining an eye on the beast.
Desenredando el lazo varias vueltas, suelta al puerco que
chilla otra vez de manera indecente, como demonio gordo.
Unwrapping the cord several turns, she loosens the pig
which squeels again obscenely at her, like a fat demon.
El bebé vuela felizmente bajo su brazo; con sus ojos
abiertos; no llora, ni siquiera parece estar alarmado.
The baby along for the ride sails freely under her arm;
he is wide-eyed, not crying, seemingly not even alarmed.
La madre trae la canasta de las tortillas, el agua, la sal y el chile;
mueve los frijoles, mientras que el padre se va a bañar y a cambiarse.
The mother is bringing out the tortilla basket, water, salt and chili;
she stirs the beans, while the father had gone to bathe and to change.
Una vez que el puerco se ha calmado en su chicero,
el bebé empieza a llorar con gemidos estruendosos.
After the pig had been settled again in its muddy patch,
the baby starts up crying, letting out outrageous wails.
James Santiago said:
Just a couple of suggestions:
*y ya sabes que pasará, tú vas a ganarte una buena paliza!?
then you know what will happen, your ass will be up in the air!"*
Then you know what will happen; you're gonna get yourself a whippin'.
I think that matches the register more closely.
*El bebé vuela felizmente bajo su brazo; con sus ojos
abiertos, no llora, ni siquiera parece estar alarmado.
The baby along for the ride sails freely under her arm;
he is wide-eyed, not crying, not even alarmed seemingly.*
The baby rides happily under her arm; his eyes open, he
doesn't cry, and doesn't even seem alarmed.
GREAT THANKS A LOT JAMES . CHANGES TO MASTER DOC
Azucena Scene 4 '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
'Azucena, ese puerco se va a ahorcar si no tienes cuidado;
y ya sabes que pasará, tú vas a ganarte una buena paliza!?
"Azucena, that pig will choke itself if you don't take more care;
you know what will happen; you're going to get yourself a whippin'.
El puerco estaba amarrado a un poste en un lodazal y tenía
el lazo enredado, estaba tirado gruñendo en el terreno lodo.
The pig was tied to a post in a wallow and had wrapped the lasso
around and around, was lying there grunting, in the muddy ground.
Todavía con el bebé bajo su brazo, se acerca al puerco
que le gruñe con un disgusto y aparente desesperación.
With the baby underarm still, she approaches the porker
that grunts at her in an apparent disgusted desperation.
Con el lodo saliendo entre los dedos de sus pies, se planta
en el lodazal, estirándose ? manteniendo un ojo en la bestia.
Sticky mud coming through her toes, she plants her bare feet
in the wallow, reaching out - maintaining an eye on the beast.
Desenredando el lazo varias vueltas, suelta al puerco que
chilla otra vez de manera indecente, como demonio gordo.
Unwrapping the cord several turns, she loosens the pig
which squeels again obscenely at her, like a fat demon.
El bebé vuela felizmente bajo su brazo; con sus ojos
abiertos; no llora, ni siquiera parece estar alarmado.
The baby along for the ride sails freely under her arm;
he is wide-eyed, not crying, not even alarmed seemingly.
La madre trae la canasta de las tortillas, el agua, la sal y el chile;
mueve los frijoles, mientras que el padre se va a bañar y a cambiarse.
The mother is bringing out the tortilla basket, water, salt and chili;
she stirs the beans, while the father had gone to bathe and to change.
Una vez que el puerco se ha calmado en su chicero,
el bebé empieza a llorar con gemidos estruendosos.
After the pig had been settled again in its muddy patch,
the baby starts up crying, letting out outrageous wails.
Redimida said:
The translation seems pretty good. I'll tell you one thing though; pigs don't grunt when they are upset. They squeal/scream. It's the most awful sound; whether you are butchering, castrating, or untangling them. I will never own another pig!
Azucena Scene 4 '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
'Azucena, el puerco se va a ahorcar si no tienes cuidado;
y ya sabes que pasará, tú vas a ganarte una buena paliza!?
"Azucena the pig will choke itself if you don't take more care;
then you know what will happen, your ass will be up in the air!"
El puerco estaba amarrado a un poste en un lodazal y tenía
el lazo enredado, estaba tirado gruñendo en el terreno lodo.
The pig was tied to a post in a wallow and had wrapped the lasso
around and around, was lying there grunting, in the muddy ground.
Todavía con el bebé bajo su brazo, se acerca al puerco
que le gruñe con un disgusto y aparente desesperación.
With the baby underarm still, she approaches the porker
that grunts at her in an apparent disgusted desperation.
Con el lodo saliendo entre los dedos de sus pies, se planta
en el lodazal, estirándose ? manteniendo un ojo en la bestia.
Sticky mud coming through her toes, she plants her bare feet
in the wallow, reaching out - maintaining an eye on the beast.
Desenredando el lazo varias vueltas, suelta al puerco que
chilla otra vez de manera indecente, como demonio gordo.
Unwrapping the cord several turns, she loosens the pig
which squeels again obscenely at her, like a fat demon.
El bebé vuela felizmente bajo su brazo; con sus ojos
abiertos, no llora, ni siquiera parece estar alarmado.
The baby along for the ride sails freely under her arm;
he is wide-eyed, not crying, not even alarmed seemingly.
La madre trae la canasta de las tortillas, el agua, la sal y el chile;
mueve los frijoles, mientras que el padre se va a bañar y a cambiarse.
The mother is bringing out the tortilla basket, water, salt and chili;
she stirs the beans, while the father had gone to bathe and to change.
Una vez que el puerco se ha calmado en su chicero,
el bebé empieza a llorar con gemidos estruendosos.
After the pig had been settled again in its muddy patch,
the baby starts up crying, letting out outrageous wails.
THANK YOU THIS CHANGE IS MADE TO THE MASTER DOCUMENT
(as well as a few more improvements to these English Spanish versions)
Unwrapping the cord several turns, she loosens the pig
which squeals again obscenely at her, like a fat demon.
Thanks!
The translation seems pretty good. I'll tell you one thing though; pigs don't grunt when they are upset. They squeal/scream. It's the most awful sound; whether you are butchering, castrating, or untangling them. I will never own another pig!
