Azucena scene 1
AZUCENA
scene 1 '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
Una bella joven indígena esta lavando ropa en un lavadero de piedra
cerca de donde corre agua en el patio de una cabaña hecha con adobe.
A pretty young indian girl is washing clothes on a rough rock
by a water trough in the dusty yard of an adobe brick cottage.
El ruido de la ropa contra la piedra se oye repetidamente,
golpeando, raspando y salpicando con el vigor del tallado.
The slap slap slap of the wet cloth smacks against the stone,
splashing, scraping, and rasping with the vigorous scrubbing.
Los movimientos del lavado son repetidos, fluidos, naturales;
mientras ella azota la ropa mojada con sus gestos expresivos.
The watery washing motions are repeated, fluid, natural;
she slaps the damp clothing down with expressive gesture.
Después de unos momentos, siguiendo el ritmo de su trabajo,
suavemente entona una canción de la radio de un amor perdido.
After a few moments, in tune with the rhythm of her work,
she softly sings aloud a poignant radio song of lost love.
La tonada le sale, manteniendo la melodía a la perfección;
en el sonido hay una autoconcentración y la soledad íntima.
The melody comes from her, as she holds the tune perfectly;
in her sound is a self-concentration and intimate solitude.
Ella esta cantando para ella misma y para nadie más;
incansablemente, ella continúa tallando un pantalón.
She is singing to herself, to nobody else;
tirelessly, she is beating clean the pants.
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IN ADVANCE FOR YOUR KIND ASSISTANCE.
GRACIAS.
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scene 1 ***********************************************************
Una joven campesina esta lavando ropa en un lavadero de piedra
cerca de donde corre agua en el patio de una casa hecha de adobe.
A young country girl is washing clothes on a rough rock near
where water runs, in the dusty yard of an adobe brick cottage.
Los golpes de la ropa contra la piedra se oye repetidamente,
golpeando, raspando y salpicando con el vigor del lavado.
The slap slap slap of the wet cloth smacks against the stone,
splashing, scraping, and rasping with the vigorous scrubbing.
Los movimientos del lavado son repetidos, fluidos, naturales;
mientras ella azota la ropa mojada con sus gestos expresivos.
The watery washing motions are repeated, fluid, natural;
she beats the damp clothing down with expressive gesture.
Después de unos momentos, siguiendo el ritmo de su trabajo,
suavemente entona una canción de la radio de un amor perdido.
After a few moments, in tune with the rhythm of her work,
she softly sings aloud a poignant radio song of lost love.
La tonada le sale, manteniendo la melodía a la perfección;
el sonido esta lleno de autoconcentración y la soledad íntima.
The melody comes from her as she holds the tune perfectly;
in the sound is self-concentration, and intimate solitude.
Ella esta cantando para ella misma y para nadie más;
incansablemente, ella continúa lavando un pantalón.
She is singing to herself, to nobody else;
tirelessly, she is scrubbing clean the pants.
THESE CHANGES HAVE BEEN MADE TO AZUCENA DOCUMENT
WITH OUR THANKS TO NATASHA
AZUCENA scene 1 '''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''''
Una bella joven indígena esta lavando ropa en un lavadero de piedra
cerca de donde corre agua en el patio de una cabaña hecha con adobe.
A pretty young indian girl is washing clothes on a rough rock
where water runs, in the dusty yard of an adobe brick cottage.
El ruido de la ropa contra la piedra se oye repetidamente,
golpeando, raspando y salpicando con el vigor del tallado.
The slap slap slap of the wet cloth smacks against the stone,
splashing, scraping, and rasping with the vigorous scrubbing.
Los movimientos del lavado son repetidos, fluidos, naturales;
mientras ella azota la ropa mojada con sus gestos expresivos.
The watery washing motions are repeated, fluid, natural;
she beats the damp clothing down with expressive gesture.
Después de unos momentos, siguiendo el ritmo de su trabajo,
suavemente entona una canción de la radio de un amor perdido.
After a few moments, in tune with the rhythm of her work,
she softly sings aloud a poignant radio song of lost love.
La tonada le sale, manteniendo la melodía a la perfección;
en el sonido hay una autoconcentración y la soledad íntima.
The melody comes from her as she holds the tune perfectly;
in the sound is self-concentration, and intimate solitude.
Ella esta cantando para ella misma y para nadie más;
incansablemente, ella continúa tallando un pantalón.
She is singing to herself, to nobody else;
tirelessly, she is scrubbing clean the pants.
thank you very much your collaboration in this experimental novel Azucena, is appreciated by us
http://artcamp.com.mx/azucenanovela/ - saludos amigos de taxco de alarcón, guerrero, méxico!
Looks good! A few alternate suggestions:
A pretty young indian girl is washing clothes on a stone washbasin?
by where the water runs / where there's running water in the dusty yard of an adobe brick cottage.
The watery washing motions are repeated, fluid, natural;
she scrubs / beats the wet garments with expressive gesture.
The melody comes from her, as she holds the tune perfectly;
in the sound there is self-concentration and intimate solitude.
She is singing for herself, for nobody else;
tirelessly, she continues with scrubbing a pair of pants.
