Is this script right?

Question

Hi, everybody,

I am writing a script for a conversation that I will have with a native teacher, and I am preparing for it. I would like if someone can help me telling me if the script is right. Thanks.

Hi, nice to meet you! My name is Carlos, I live in Cali, Colombia and I’m very excited to talk to you. I do not speak English very well, but I’m learning. Where do you live? I live in ___________ Awesome! It’s always been my dream to visit your country, I think it’s a beautiful place! I really love it. I want to learn more about it. Pause……wait answer from my interlocutor. If the answer is positive: That sounds awesome! I definitely want to go there. Pause….if it asks me about what do you do? I will answer: I’m a commercial adviser and I work for a bank, I’m a business administration student, too, I’ll be graduating from my bachelor in December. I’m very happy because obtain this achievement, it’s very important to get a new job or why not get a promotion in my Company. What about you? What do you do for a living? Pause……To wait its answer. That sounds cool! So. What’s your favourite thing to do? Pause……To wait its answer.

welcome to the forum, :) - 006595c6, Sep 10, 2017

Answer 1

Hi Carlos. You've had some good suggestions already, but here's another broken up into a dialogue. Keep in mind that the other person in your upcoming conversation may not know the script

Hi, nice to meet you! My name is Carlos. I live in Cali, Colombia and I’m very excited to talk to you. I do not speak English very well, but I’m learning. Where do you live?

I live in ___________.

Awesome! It’s always been my dream to visit your country. I think it’s a beautiful place! I really love it. Can you tell me more about it.

It's ___________ (positive).

That sounds awesome! I definitely want to go there.

What do you do?

I’m a commercial adviser and I work for a bank. I’m a business administration student too. I’ll be graduating with my bachelor degree in December. I'll be very happy with this achievement as it can help me obtain a new job or a promotion in my Company. What about you? What do you do for a living?

I'm a teacher (presumably).

That sounds cool! So, what’s your favourite thing to do?

Adding to Bosque's comment regarding "it" you can use the singular "they" for a person of unknown gender, but while most English speakers now accept this usage there are still some that strongly dislike it.

Hi, Jellonz, Thanks for your support - Carlos8357, Sep 11, 2017

De nada Carlos. - jellonz, Sep 11, 2017

Answer 2

Hola Carlos, buena pregunta

Hi, nice to meet you! My name is Carlos, I live in Cali, Colombia and I’m very excited to talk to you. I do not speak English very well, but I’m learning. Where do you live? I live in ___________ Awesome! It’s always been my dream to visit your country, I think it’s a beautiful place! I really love it. I want to learn more about it. Pause……waiting for an answer from my interlocutor. If the answer is positive: That sounds awesome! I definitely want to go there. Pause….if he/she asks me about what do you do? I will answer: I’m a commercial adviser and I work for a bank, I’m a business administration student, too, I’ll be graduating from my bachelor in December. I’m very happy because obtaining this achievement is very important to get a new job or, why not, maybe get a promotion in my Company. What about you? What do you do for a living? Pause……Waiting for an answer That sounds cool! So. What’s your favourite thing to do/ What do you like doing? What are you into...sports? Music? Pause……waiting for an answer

Mira, he hecho algunos cambios...para mí está muy bien hecho, ya lo verás, lo harás perfecto.

"What’s your favourite thing to do" should be "What’s your favourite hobby or pastime?" - NKM1974, Sep 10, 2017

"What’s your favourite thing to do?" is perfectly natural English Nkm. It's synonymous with "What’s your favourite hobby / pastime?" or, if anything, a little broader in scope. - jellonz, Sep 11, 2017

Hola Heidita2, - Carlos8357, Sep 11, 2017

Hola Heidita2, Gracias por las correcciones a mi guión, estoy tomando en cuenta la de todos los que me corrigieron ya que al parecer todas son valiosas, solo con ciertas diferencias en el estilo de la conversación. - Carlos8357, Sep 11, 2017

Answer 3

Hi, everybody,

I am writing a script for a conversation that I will have with a native teacher, and I am preparing for it. I would like it if someone could help by me by telling me if the script is right. Thanks.

Hi, nice to meet you! My name is Carlos, I live in Cali, Colombia and I’m very excited to talk to you. I do not speak English very well, but I’m learning. Where do you live? I live in ___________ Awesome! It’s always been my dream to visit your country, I think it’s a beautiful place! I really love it. I want to learn more about it. Pause……wait for an answer from my interlocutor. If the answer is positive: That sounds awesome! I definitely want to go there. Pause….if it he asks me: about what do you do? I will answer: I’m a commercial adviser and I work for a bank, I’m a business administration student, too, I’ll be graduating from with my bachelor’s degree in December. I’m very happy because due to obtaining this achievement, it’s very important to in order to get a new job or, why not, in order to get a promotion in my company. What about you? What do you do for a living ? Pause……To wait Awaiting it his answer. That sounds cool! So. What’s your favourite thing to do? Pause……To wait Awaiting it his answer.

Do not refer to people with it, ever, you can use he in normal English to refer to person of unknown gender. I left interlocutor, but I doubt half the people I know would know what that word means- interviewer might be a better choice.

Awaiting or wait for work interchangeably depending on whether you want a "command to self" or a description of your action.

I did not fix all the punctuation, it is not a skill I have.

Answer 4

Hola Carlos, solo te he dado una pocas ideas, mira las de los nativos, serán mejores, siempre que las sepas usar bien.

Buena suerte