I need you help guys! Could you proofread this, please?
Past
Last month I was in India on a business trip, it’s really a beautiful county, while I was walking on the streets I saw cows, people selling fruits and kids playing football
One day, I was eating breakfast at the hotel and I found small squirrel climbing the trees, I went to the bottom of the tree and left some food for it
Yesterday there was a big accident in the main road, all cars stopped until ambulance arrived, it took 10 mins until we start moving again
Last weekend we were at the beach with friends, we stayed till late, when we decided to hit the road and come back we found our friend’s car broke down, it didn’t work until we called the service, after 30 mins the car service guy came with a truck and started the engine but he didn’t solve the issue permanently , he asked us to come back the next day to the service center to check the car again
Present
I am in my office at the moment, work load is not busy today so I am writing short stories to discuss with my tutor in my evening class
I drink coffee a lot during work, usually 2 to 3 cups a day
Today I have a birthday party at 7.00 for my colleague at work, he will do it in a nice place next to the office
Future
I am expecting a baby this year, he is a boy, I still didn’t choose the name but myself and my wife we are discussing different names
Next year resolution, I want to get a new car next year and I would love to change my apartment to a bigger one, also I want to go to Europe with my family
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My thoughts; others might have other thoughts, I tried to minimal changes. It was well written and most of my changes are quibbling with run-on sentences of the type I write all the time . Only once was it weird:
Past
Last month I was in India on a business trip, it’s really a beautiful county, while I was walking on the streets I saw cows, people selling fruits and kids playing football
The English is fine, although I do this all the time, the punctuation is wrong, they are independent phrases that need some connection:
Last month I was in India on a business trip- it’s really a beautiful county- and while I was walking on the streets I saw cows and people selling fruits and kids playing football.
One day, I was eating breakfast at the hotel and I found small squirrel climbing the trees, I went to the bottom of the tree and left some food for it.
Change the comma after trees to a period or add and, and you would be fine.
Yesterday there was a big accident in the main road, all cars stopped until ambulance arrived, it took 10 mins until we start moving again
Normally in writing we do not abbreviate minutes, again mostly punctuation. Start needs to be started.
Yesterday there was a big accident in the main road- all cars stopped until ambulance arrived- and it took 10 minutes until we started moving again
Last weekend we were at the beach with friends, we stayed till late, when we decided to hit the road and come back we found our friend’s car broke down, it didn’t work until we called the service, after 30 mins the car service guy came with a truck and started the engine but he didn’t solve the issue permanently , he asked us to come back the next day to the service center to check the car again
Mostly connections, I like had broken down better. Was broken down would work. Even simply broken down instead of broke down might be okay.
Last weekend we were at the beach with friends and we stayed till late- when we decided to hit the road and come back we found our friend’s car had broken down- it didn’t work until we called the service- after 30 minutes the car service guy came with a truck and started the engine, but he didn’t solve the issue permanently, so he asked us to come back the next day to the service center to check the car again
Present
I am in my office at the moment, work load is not busy today so I am writing short stories to discuss with my tutor in my evening class
the work load- I need the article. Also semicolon not comma, or and.
I drink coffee a lot during work, usually 2 to 3 cups a day
okay
Today I have a birthday party at 7.00 for my colleague at work, he will do it in a nice place next to the office
7:00 at least in American English, a colleague unless he is the only one. He will do it in a nice place is distinctly odd= we will have it at a nice place sounds much better if that is what you mean.
Future
I am expecting a baby this year, he is a boy, I still didn’t choose the name but myself and my wife we are discussing different names
I still didn't choose doesn't work
I am expecting a baby this year- he is (will be) a boy - I haven't chosen the name but my wife and I are discussing different names.
Different options would avoid duplicating names.
Next year resolution, I want to get a new car next year and I would love to change my apartment to a bigger one, also I want to go to Europe with my family
possessive and punctuation:
Next year's resolution: I want to get a new car (next year) and I would love to change my apartment to a bigger one; also I want to go to Europe with my family.
I really wouldn't repeat next year, but that is stylistic.
Doctor:
I just made changes, didn't do bolding, strikeouts, etc. which would take a lot more time. Your text was 100% understandable, but, I would say 60%-70% natural and I'm guessing your goal is to get to 90% + on that score. Let me know if there are any particular changes that you are wondering why I made them and I'll let you know. Feel free to add to my response or even edit it rather if that would suit you better than using the comments section. You do have editing privileges for other people's posts, don't you. If not, you can make a new answer and then I can edit there if necessary.
Last month I was in India on a business trip. it was really a beautiful county and while I was walking on the streets I saw cows, people selling fruit and kids playing football
One day, I was eating breakfast at the hotel and I saw a small squirrel climbing a tree. I went to the bottom of the tree and left some food for it.
Yesterday there was a big accident on the main road. All the cars stopped until an ambulance arrived and it took 10 mins until we start moving again. What a hassle!
Last weekend we were at the beach with some friends, We stayed pretty late and then we decided to hit the road. When we came back we found our friend’s car broken down. So, we called for help and after 30 minutes the car service guy came with a truck and he got the engine started. Unfortunately this didn’t completely solve the issue. The car was running rough, so he asked us to come the next day to the service center to do a more thorough check-up.
Present
I am in my office at the moment. My work load isn't too heavy so I am writing short stories to discuss with my tutor in my evening class.
I drink a lot of coffee during work: at least 2 to 3 cups a day.
Today I have a birthday party at 7.00 for a guy from work. We're going to have it in a nice place next to the office.
Future
My wife and I are expecting a baby this year. We know it's going to be a boy. We haven't chosen a name yet but we are discussing different options.
Here are my new year's resolutions: I'm going to get a new car, move to a larger apartment and go to Europe with my family. Well, they're resolutions, so I can't guarantee that all of them will happen, but I'll sure try.
Hello Doctor Spanish
Very good attempt! Great work! I have made corrections/ recommendations in bold type according to British English. I have kept one particular expression: 'hit the road' as we often use this expression. (It is commonly used) Your original text was understandable but some of the wording was not natural in the way that a native would express it in England. Try to avoid using so many commas. Maybe that is the American way. I hope these corrections help! 
Past
Last month I was in India on a business trip. It’s a really beautiful countRy. While I was walking through the streets I saw cows, people selling fruit, and kids playing football.
(Please note: When talking about different fruits collectively (in the plural form) we say fruit)
One day, I was eating breakfast at the hotel and I came across a small squirrel climbing the trees. I went to the bottom of the tree and left some food for it.
Yesterday there was a big accident in the main road, and all the cars stopped until an ambulance arrived. It took 10 mins until we started moving again.
Last weekend we were at the beach with friends. We stayed 'til late, then we decided to 'hit the road' (start driving) again and come back when we found our friend’s car had broken down. It didn’t work until we called the breakdown service. After 30 mins the mechanic came with a truck and started the engine but he didn’t solve the issue permanently. He asked us to come back the next day to the service center to check the car again.
Present
I am in my office at the moment, my work load is not heavy today so I am writing short stories to discuss with my tutor in my evening class. Y I drink a lot of coffee during work, usually 2 to 3 cups a day.
Today I have a birthday party at 7.00 pm for my colleague at work. He will celebrate it in a nice place next to the office.
Future
I am expecting a baby this year. He will be a boy. I still haven't chosen the name but my wife and I are discussing different names.
Next year's resolution: I want to get a new car next year and I would love to exchange my apartment for a bigger one, also I would like to go to Europe with my family.
DoctorSpanish,
This is very good, but there were a few minor errors.
Past
Last month I was in India on a business trip, it’s really a beautiful county, while I was walking on the streets I saw cows, people selling fruits and kids playing football
One day, I was eating breakfast at the hotel and I found small squirrel climbing the trees, I went to the bottom of the tree and left some food for it
Yesterday there was a big accident in the main road, all cars stopped until ambulance arrived, it took 10 mins until we start moving again
Last weekend we were at the beach with friends, we stayed till late, when we decided to hit the road and come back we found our friend’s car broke down, it didn’t work until we called the service, after 30 mins the car service guy came with a truck and started the engine but he didn’t solve the issue permanently , he asked us to come back the next day to the service center to check the car again
Your first section is written well, except that the punctuation is incorrect.
Last month I was in India on a business trip. It’s really a beautiful county. While I was walking on the streets I saw cows, people selling fruit, and kids playing football.
Also, as you were not looking for a squirrel, you saw, but didn't find, it.
One day, I was eating breakfast at the hotel and I saw small squirrel climbing the trees. I went to the bottom of the tree and I left some food for it
Again, your commas should be periods and semicolons:
Yesterday there was a big accident in the main road; all of the cars stopped until ambulance arrived. It took 10 mins until we started moving again.
Again your commas should be periods. Also, late is not a time. Here, it is being used as an adverb. Also, a car service guy is known as a mechanic.
Last weekend we were at the beach with friends. We stayed late. When we decided to hit the road and come back, we found that our friend’s car broke down. It didn’t work until we called the service. After 30 mins, the mechanic came with a truck and started the engine, but he didn’t solve the issue permanently. He asked us to come back the next day to the service center to check the car again.
Present
I am in my office at the moment, work load is not busy today so I am writing short stories to discuss with my tutor in my evening class
I drink coffee a lot during work, usually 2 to 3 cups a day
Today I have a birthday party at 7.00 for my colleague at work, he will do it in a nice place next to the office
Like before, the punctuation is off. Also, work loads cannot do anything, so the cannot be busy.
I am in my office at the moment. The work load is not a lot today, so I am writing short stories to discuss with my tutor during my evening class.
The next sentence is fine.
I drink coffee a lot during work, usually 2 to 3 cups a day.
Two things about the next one: English time uses colons and not periods and one does not do a party; one haves one.
Today I have a birthday party at 7:00 for my colleague at work. He will have it in a nice place next to the office.
Future
I am expecting a baby this year, he is a boy, I still didn’t choose the name but myself and my wife we are discussing different names
Next year resolution, I want to get a new car next year and I would love to change my apartment to a bigger one, also I want to go to Europe with my family
For the first part, there are punctuation and subject errors. It is not "myself and my wife we are", it is "my wife and I are".
I am expecting a baby this year; he is a boy. I still didn’t choose the name but my wife and I are discussing different names.
Finally, "next year resolution" should be "For my New Year's resolution". Also, it is not incorrect, but I suggest that you combine everything into one sentence and make it more concise, as next year is implied by the NEW YEAR's resolution.
For my New Year's resolution, I want to get a new car, change my apartment to a bigger one, and go to Europe with my family.
Gracias por su ayuda amigos! I gave you all a vote.
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