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Please proofread this translation. The Spanish text is from an article; the translation is mine:

Después de mencionar los diferentes tipos de universidades, descartaba seguir tanto el “anglo-sajón” como el “germano” (“que no se avienen con nuestra mentalidad y costumbres”). Por tanto, señalaba “la necesidad (en atención a ‘nuestras condiciones económicas, de población y de personal’) de ‘tomar como modelo’ el de las pequeñas universidades del tipo ‘latino’ (como las de Lausana en Suiza y Estrasburgo en Francia) que ‘en escala reducida… llenan las condiciones de modernidad, seriedad, orden y solidez de estudios”.

After mentioning the different types of universities, he ruled out the “Anglo-Saxon” and “German” models (“because they are not compatible with our mentality and customs”). Therefore, he pointed out “the need (considering ´our economic conditions of population and personnel) of ´taking as a model that of the little universities of the ´Latin` type (such as those of Lausanne in Switzerland and Strasburg in France), that ´on a small scale…fulfill the conditions of modernity, seriousness, order, and solidness of studies.”

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After mentioning the different types of universities, he ruled out the “Anglo-Saxon” and “German” models (“because they are not compatible with our mentality and customs”). Therefore, he pointed out “the need (considering ´our economic conditions of population and personnel) of ´taking to use as a model that of the little universities of the ´Latin` type (such as those of Lausanne in Switzerland and Strasburg in France), that ´on a small scale…fulfill the conditions of modernity, seriousness, order, and solidness of studies.”

Very well done, just needs a little wordsmithing in my opinion.

I think it reads better simply removing the (that of).

I prefer "need to take" over "need of taking". I get less confused by all the "of"s that way. I prefer even better switching take to use.

Great work, Bosque :) I would also change the word 'small' for the word little universities This is just a matter of personal style not because there is actually anything wrong with the word little in this context I just think that small sounds better - FELIZ77, Mar 2, 2017

I agree, either is correct, but small sounds a bit more refined there. :) - bosquederoble, Mar 2, 2017