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Topic is: Should companies allow employees to exercise on work time?
Each year millions of people around the world dies, due to health problems. According to the last report published in 2014 by the World Health Organization (WHO), the leading causes of deaths in the world are: Ischaemic heart disease with 7,4 million of deaths; stroke with 6,7 million of deaths; lower respiratory infections and chronic obstructive lung disease each one with 3,1 million of deaths. Furthermore, in 2013 the Instituto Nacional de Estadisticas y Censo (INEC) of Ecuador, published a document with the data about birth and deaths of the year. There were 63,104 deaths, of which 4,695 were due to diabetes mellitus and 4,189 hypertensive diseases, being these the main causes of death in the country.
World Health Organization reports, says that at least 60% of the world population does not perform the physical activity necessary to obtain health benefits. The inactivity levels are higher in developed countries and have become the main problem of public health. Therefore, it is necessary to act against this problem by taking effective measures to improve the physical activity of all populations. Therefore, leading a healthy life consisting of a balanced diet and constant physical activity decreases the risk of disease and improves the evolution of many of them.
As I already mentioned, the main cause of death in the world is Ischaemic heart disease, which is produced when an artery narrows and obstructs momentarily, impeding that the heart muscle reach enough blood and oxygen. Dr.Jesús Rojo Gonzales in his article An analysis of physical activity for health, talks about the physical activity and the Ischaemic Heart disease and argue that moderate physical activity in specific aerobics exercises that are performed on a constant basis and with a frequency of more than 3 hours on a week, increases the cardiac contractility, allowing cardiac output to be maintained with a reduction in the frequency so that the heart will have to work less to get blood to reach all tissues (7). Other of the causes that lead death is Diabetes Mellitus, which is a disease that occurs when the pancreas cannot produce enough insulin or when it fails to function in the body because the cells do not respond to its stimulus. According to the article Health and beneficial effects of physical activity: “Physical activity modifies body composition, i.e. increases muscle mass and decreases fat percentage. This would have a synergistic action on insulin, making the entry of glucose into the cell easier and increase the sensitivity of the receptors to insulin”. (De Abajo et al. 7)
“The Surgeon General’s report on Physical Activity and Health advises at least 30 minutes a day of moderate exercise” (Chenoweth 56). Some people argue that they do not exercise because of lack of time, so doing exercise at the place where they spend most of their time, at work, it’s a wonderful idea. That's why companies should allow employees to exercise on work time.
Exercising at job have several benefits. As productivity boost, a study has shown that employees that uses the worktime for exercising can maintain the same level of productivity or higher at work. “Employees who spent 2.5 hours a week being physically active were more satisfied with the quantity and quality of their work, reported increased work ability and took less sick time than employees who did not engage in physical activity” (McKenzie par.2). Another study has shown that workers who exercise at least 4 hours per week have improved they balance between work and life, have decreased the probability that job burnout became into depression or stress. The productivity boos is produces because exercise fuels your brain and this made an increase of productivity, and also made employees more energized and focused.
Researches of the University of Birmingham, observed 56 sedentary employees at the university, to discover if walking during the day would improve their perspective about office. The workers had to walk during 30 minutes in their lunch period, minimum three times per week. The scientists measure the employees emotions reasoned in their enthusiasm, stress and the workload, as result they discovered that walking improves the workers mood, their ability for managing stress at work and also they get relaxed, improved their enthusiasm and set aside the nervousness at work. (Holmes par.3-4).
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Topic is: Should companies allow employees to exercise during working hours?
Each year millions of people around the world die, due to health problems. According to the last report published in 2014 by the World Health Organization (WHO), the leading causes of deaths worldwide are: Ischaemic heart disease causing 7.4 million of deaths; strokes 6.7 million; lower respiratory infections and chronic obstructive lung disease with 3.1 million deaths respectively. Furthermore, in 2013 the Instituto Nacional de Estadisticas y Censo (INEC) of Ecuador, published a document on birth and death statistics for that year. There were 63,104 deaths, of which 4,695 were due to diabetes mellitus and 4,189 hypertensive diseases, being the main causes of death in the country. The World Health Organization states that at least 60% of the world population does not do enough physical activity to obtain optimum health.The inactivity levels are higher in developed countries and have become the main concerns.Therefore, it is necessary to act against this problem by taking effective measures to improve the physical activity of the entire population. Therefore, leading a healthy life consisting of a balanced diet and constant physical activity decreases the risk of disease and improves the evolution of many of them. As previously mentioned, the main cause of death in the world is Ischaemic heart disease, which is produced when an artery narrows and obstructs the blood flow, thus the heart is deprived of both blood and oxygen. Dr.Jesús Rojo Gonzales in his article “An Analysis Of Physical Activity For Health”, talks about the benefits of physical activity in cases of Ischaemic Heart disease and argues that moderate physical aerobic exercise of more than 3 hours a week, increases the cardiac strength, therefore allowing the heart to work without stress to maintain healthy delivery of blood and oxygen to the body (7). Other causes of death is Diabetes Mellitus, which is a disease that occurs when the pancreas cannot produce enough insulin or when it fails to function because the cells do not respond to its stimulus. According to the article Health and Beneficial Effects of Physical Activity: “Physical activity modifies body composition, i.e. increases muscle mass and decreases fat percentage. This would have a synergistic action on insulin, making the entry of glucose into the cells easier and increase the sensitivity of the receptors to insulin”. (De Abajo et al. 7) “The Surgeon General’s report on Physical Activity and Health advises at least 30 minutes a day of moderate exercise” (Chenoweth 56). Some people argue that they do not exercise because of lack of time, so doing exercise at the place where they spend most of their time, at work, makes sense. That's why companies should allow employees to exercise during work time. Exercising at work has several benefits. A study has shown that employees who use work time for exercising can maintain the same level of productivity or even higher “Employees who spent 2.5 hours a week being physically active were more satisfied with the quantity and quality of their work, reported increased work ability and took less sick time than employees who did not engage in physical activity” (McKenzie par.2). Another study has shown that workers who exercise at least 4 hours per week have improved their balance between work and leisure,and have decreased the probability that job burnout makes for depression or stress. The productivity boost is achieved because exercise fuels your brain and this increases productivity, and also makes employees more energized and focused. Researchers from the University of Birmingham, observed 56 sedentary employees at the university, discovered that walking during the day could improve their working life. The workers had to walk for 30 minutes during their lunch period, The scientists found as a result a general mood change and the employees were more enthusiastic about their work and were less stressed (Holmes par.3-4).
I had intended to have a go, but was going to do just half. However, Margarita has done an excellent job. You need to make sure your verbs agree with the subject and where you are setting out a formal discussion it is better in the third person - Margarita has removed your 'as I already mentioned. I wouldn't use 'That's why' in a formal paper - either write in full or better join it to the sentence before with therefore or thus or start the new sentence with 'clearly'. Another possibility is to finish your piece with the sentence 'clearly companies should ..' as your paper is all about the good reasons for companies encouraging exercise at work. One minor point 'Researches of should be researchers from I would use observing 56 ..
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