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Does this make sense so far?!

En los Estados Unidos, el porcentaje de personas quien están parados o detenidos por la policía es desproporcionadamente negro. Algunas personas creen que esta es porque los Estadounidense Africanos cometen crímenes más frecuentemente, pero esta no es verdad. La historia de racismo en los Estados Unidos es muy largo, y prejuicio aun es muy común. El prejuicio peor es por las policías; si ellos sean prejuicioso contra las personas negras, puede arruinar sus vidas.

English: In the United States, the percentage of people who are pulled over or detained by the police is disproportionately back. Some people believe that this is because African Americans commit crimes more frequently, but this is not true. The history of racism in the United States is long, and prejudice is still common today. The worst prejudice is in police; if they are prejudiced against black people, it can ruin their lives.

If not, what needs work? Any help is much appreciated; gracias!

Welcome to spanishdict. We ask that all new members complete their profiles with their native language, and what level of Spanish you feel you are, like, beginner, intermediate, etc. as well as gender. - ray76, Nov 11, 2016

You need to provide the English translation so that we can check it , it also helps members that are learning English , thanks mate. - ray76, Nov 11, 2016

Thanks for the profile , worth a vote from me mate. - ray76, Nov 12, 2016

Answer 1

English: In the United States, the percentage of people who are pulled over or detained by the police is disproportionately back. Some people believe that this is because African Americans commit crimes more frequently, but this is not true. The history of racism in the United States is long, and prejudice is still common today. The worst prejudice is in police; if they are prejudiced against black people, it can ruin their lives.

Your correction.

En los Estados Unidos, el porcentaje de personas que son paradAs o detenidAs por la policía son desproporcionadamente negrAS. Algunas personas creen que esto es porque los Estadounidenses Africanos cometen crímenes más frecuentemente, pero estA no es LA verdad/ estO no es verdad. La historia deL racismo en los Estados Unidos es muy largA, y los prejuicios aún son muy comunes. Los peores prejuicios los tiene la policía; si ellos tienen prejuicios contra las personas negras, puede arruinar sus vidas.

.-personAS->(femenine plural)SON->paradAS->detenidAS-->negrAS.(better and more polite "de razA negrA").you can choose gente instead personas then it would be. La gente (femenine singular)es-parada-detenida-negra.

-creen que estO ( este hecho, this fact).

-LOS estadounidenseS africanOS( understable but "better los estadounidenses de origen africano". Because they are not from Africa they are from America. Their origin yes it is.).

-In Spanish we use the verb to have much more than the verb to be with prejuices like to be cold to be hungry.

La policia TIENE prejuicios raciales. La agente de policia tiene frio y hambre.

In both texts I can't see clearly who's life could be ruined by the prejuices. Black people's life.? Police's life?

(Este hecho)PuedE arruinar/(los prejuicios) puedEN arruinar)

Please correct my English