Composition- Can someone please proof this for my Spanish 1 class. Thank you!

Question

Hola mi nombre es Jessica y tengo 19 años. Estoy muy feliz de ser estudiante del año. Los estudiantes son amables y simpático. Me gusta pasar el tiempo paseando por la ciudad. Este es mi primer viaje a España . Es una ciudad interesante.

La Universidad de Valencia es muy bonito. Los edificios son de altura y viejo. Mi clase favorita es la psicología. También tomo matemáticas, inglés, y la historia. Vivo en una habitación doble en la planta baja. Hace mucho sol. Mi maestro favorito es profesor Sullivan. Él es inteligente y agradable. Los fines de semana yo estudio en la biblioteca. También juego al fútbol con mis amigas.

Salamanca es muy bonito y limpio. En mi tiempo libre, voy hacer turismo e ir a la playa. Mi amigo Alex y yo gusta una excursión y acampar. Tomamos fotos para nuestras familias. La estación de tren está cerca. Tomamos vacaciones poco a cerca de las ciudades. Tengo planes de visitar museos, parques y restaurantes de esta semana.

Esta es una universidad fantástica y voy a tomo química, arte, español, y el periodismo de este semestre.

English translation:

Hello my name is Jessica and I am 19 years old. I am very happy to be the student of the year. The students here are kind and friendly. I enjoy spending time walking around the city. This is my first trip to Spain. It is an interesting city.

The University of Valencia is very beautiful. The buildings are tall and old. My favorite class is psychology. I also take Math, English, and History. I live in a double room on the ground floor. It's very sunny. My favorite teacher is Professor Sullivan. He is smart and nice. On weekends I study in the library. I also play soccer with my friends.

Salamanca is very nice and clean. In my spare time I go sightseeing and go to the beach. My friend Alex and I like hiking and camping. We take photos for our families. The train station is nearby. We take little vacations around the cities. I plan to visit museums, parks and restaurants this week.

This is a fantastic university and I will take Chemistry, Art, Spanish, and Journalism this semester.

Welcome to the forum , we want to help you so fill out your profile If you have a problem PM a mod Bienvenido al foro. Queremos ayudarle, entonces hay que llenar su perfil. Si hay un problema, envíe un mensaje personal (PM) - ray76, Jul 19, 2016

Please put in the English text so we may compare it and we need your language levels before we can judge it . - ray76, Jul 19, 2016

Thanks, I just added the translation. - jessicaruth, Jul 19, 2016

Very good, now fill in the profile with your language levels and we are all set . - ray76, Jul 20, 2016

I will give you a vote for the great translation , you will get another one for your language levels. Good luck mate. - ray76, Jul 20, 2016

Most of our native Spanish speakers will be asleep , you may have to wait a few hours for one to mosey along . - ray76, Jul 20, 2016

It's past my bedtime now, and there are quite a few mistakes. I don't have the time now, but I'll "mosey" by tomorrow, unless Julian gets here first. - Daniela2041, Jul 20, 2016

Dani is going to bed now and so am I, but your essay is confusing. Do you live in Valencia or Salamanca? - 005faa61, Jul 20, 2016

And you must complete your profile. - ray76, Jul 20, 2016

Thank you for your time. The assignment was just to create a fake story, not a true one. It's about me being going to school in Valencia but visiting Salamanca while I'm there. - jessicaruth, Jul 20, 2016

Jessica, small English correction: " It's about me going to etc ...the word 'being' is unnecessary here and conflicts with the verb going! ;) - FELIZ77, Jul 22, 2016

My correction refers to your comment above not your main text submitted! - FELIZ77, Jul 22, 2016

Answer 1

¡Hola!

Hola, mi nombre es Jessica y tengo 19 años. Estoy muy feliz de ser la estudiante del año. Los estudiantes son amables y simpáticos. Me gusta pasar el tiempo paseando por la ciudad. Este es mi primer viaje a España . Es una ciudad interesante.(if you are referring to Spain, remember that it is a country).

La Universidad de Valencia es muy bonita. Los edificios son altos y viejos. Mi clase favorita es - psicología. También tomo matemáticas, inglés, e historia. Vivo en una habitación doble en la planta baja. Hace mucho sol. Mi maestro favorito es el profesor Sullivan. Él es inteligente y agradable. Los fines de semana (yo) estudio en la biblioteca. También juego al fútbol con mis amigas.

Salamanca es muy bonita y limpia. En mi tiempo libre, voy a (gracias, bosque) hacer turismo e ir a la ¿¿playa??. A mi amigo Alex y a mí nos gusta hacer excursiones y acampar. Tomamos fotos para nuestras familias. La estación de tren está cerca. Tomamos unas pequeñas vacaciones cerca de las ciudades. Tengo planes de visitar museos, parques y restaurantes de esta semana.

Esta es una universidad fantástica y voy a tomar química, arte, español, y - periodismo - este semestre.

Jeje Salamanca + playa. - Mardle, Jul 21, 2016

:) - rac1, Jul 21, 2016

"voy a hacer turismo"? I know it sounds the same, but I think when written the "a" is there. :) - bosquederoble, Jul 21, 2016

I agree with Bosque: Voy a hacer sounds better! Anyway, the ir a construction requires the a ;) - FELIZ77, Jul 22, 2016

Great work de12, but why is the word playa placed between interrogatives? ¿¿playa?? Beach is playa in Spanish this is correct ;) - FELIZ77, Jul 22, 2016

Of course I know the word "playa", but as Madle explained, there are not beaches in Salamanca :) - de12wey, Jul 22, 2016

Answer 2

Hi Jessica Welcome to the forum. Can you add to your profile your level of English and Spanish. I assume fluent in English and probably American. Spanish high level beginner or intermediate. It is just a guide for others on the forum so they can assess any answers and how to compose their answers. For example if Daniela or Julian proof read your text you can check their profiles and see you have the benefit of people who are fluent in both languages.

I don't have time at the moment to correct your text but suggest you read through again and make sure your adjectives agree with the nouns [concordancia] You have matched some but missed many others.

As Julian notes, your reference to Salamanca must be an error. I have spent time in Salamanca and it is in the centre of Spain - there is a river by the cathedral but no beach! It is an elegant city with much to offer and a good contrast to Valencia.

I would love to go back to Valencia there is so much to see and do. Go to the ceramics museum even if you aren't keen on ceramics. It is a beautiful museum. I am a fan of Sorolla an artist from Valencia - do see some of his work in Valencia. There is a museum of his art in Madrid but there re also some good pieces in his home town.

Buena suerte

The assignment was just to come up with a hypothetical situation (not necessarily true but gramatically correctd). But thank you for going over it and for your suggestions!. - jessicaruth, Jul 20, 2016

Oh so you aren't in Valencia! On my tablet will look these evening. I've voted as you've added your level great - Mardle, Jul 20, 2016

Thank you so much- I really appreciate it. - jessicaruth, Jul 20, 2016

:) - rac1, Jul 21, 2016