Quick proofread please thanks!
Can you guys help me edit the Spanish translation of this sentence please? An explanation for the things you would change, add, or take out would be very appreciated! Thank you so much!
I need my sister to help me plan for Father's Day. A lot of people, including me and you, like to go out to eat on this day, but my sister does not.
Necesito a mi hermana para ayudarme planear el día de padre. A mucha gente, inclúyendomete, nos gusta comer afuera en este día, pero mi hermana no.
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Necesito a mi hermana para ayudarme planear el día de padre. A mucha gente, inclúyendomete, nos gusta comer afuera en este día, pero mi hermana no.
My attempt:
Necesito que mi hermana me ayude a planear para el día del padre. A mucha gente, incluyéndonos a mí y a ti, nos gusta comer afuera (en) este día, pero a mi hermana no.
This is based on what sounds better to me, recognizing that I am not a native speaker.
If you change subject it is usually better to have a que phrase ( a few verbs like permitir can be done otherwise, but I don't think necesitar works that way)- so I chose necesitar que plus subjunctive- I need that my sister help me. Ayudar is connected to another infinitive by a. I have no idea whether you need the para there- but really you are planning for the day- planear la celebración, pero planear para el día. That may just be my preference. I think it is Día del padre, or de los padres- with an article.
I have no idea of my way of doing the incluyendo part is correct, but it is my best guess- and I would not mind native opinion on that. I don't think you need "en" but it is not necessarily wrong. Mi hermana remains the indirect object of the dropped/implicit gusta comer afuera and so needs an a.
