Please help me by correcting my work!!! (Going to the doctor) year 9 work

Question

Doctor: ¿Qué te pasa?

Me: No me siento bien.

Doctor: ¿Qué tienes?

Me: Me duele la garganta y tengo tos también estoy resfriado. Pero no estoy mal del todo, también habla con la gente.

Doctor: ¿Qué te ha pasado?

Me: Lo conseguí de un amigo, en la fiesta. ¿Qué recomiendo? ¿Usted necesita tomar uña jarabe?

Doctor: Deberia tomar este jarabe tres veces al día

Me: gracias por tu ayuda.

(That was all, do u have anything I can add, please do. And I am a female so fix the gender rules please)

Welcome to SpanishDict. First, I would ask that you fill out your profile with your gender and language proficiency. Then you need to add the English version. - rac1, Apr 12, 2016

We are not here to do homework, but we will help you understand. This dialog, is it from a textbook? - rac1, Apr 12, 2016

This is my own work, this is what I plan to say on my Spanish speaking test and I just want to make sure it's perfect - Ahlamidriss, Apr 12, 2016

Then you need to add the English. Do not triple post. - rac1, Apr 12, 2016

Most of it is OK, but some sentences do not make sense and the continuity of the sentences is off. I need to see the English. I often tell my students to give me the English so I can straighten out their Spanish. - Daniela2041, Apr 12, 2016

Answer 1

I am only an advanced beginner, so take what I say with a grain of salt, but don't you mean to say "What do you recommend?" instead of "What do I recommend?" (recomienda vs recomiendo)

Also, you use the formal "usted" when speaking to the doctor until the last line of dialog when you use the familiar "tu." This might be intentional, since the doctor addresses the patient with the familiar form all along, but I thought it worth pointing out in case it wasn't.

I keep improving my English! In the UK we always say 'pinch' of salt but I now know in USA it is grain. - Mardle, Apr 12, 2016

Definitely usted to doctors and also doctor to patient , unless a child, when 'tu' is ok. - annierats, Apr 12, 2016

Answer 2

As you want to be perfect I will leave it to a native or fluent speaker to correct. This is part of what we used when we covered the topic if you want more practice.

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