My dream house composition

Question

Hi! Could you check my proofread this for me please?

Mi casa ideal es muy grande y bonita. Mi casa está en Hawai. El océano está cerca de mi casa. En mi casa hay cinco alcobas y tres baños. Yo quiero una piscina y un patio con verdes plantas. Me gusta el sol y aire fresco. Mi casa tiene un comedor por mi familia comer cena. El comedor tiene diez sillas. En la sala hay una televisión porque miró muchas películas. También hay un sofá amarillo y una alfombra roja. Mi color favorito es rojo. Mi casa tiene una biblioteca y una oficina. La cocina es muy grande porque me gusta cocinar. Vivo con mi esposo, mis hermanos, y mi perro. Mi casa es tranquila.

My ideal house is big and beautiful. My house is in Hawaii. The ocean is near my house. In my house there are 5 bedrooms and 3 bathrooms. I want a pool and a patio with green plants. I like the sun and fresh air. My house has a dining room for my family to eat dinner. The dining room has 10 chairs. In the living room there is a TV because I watch many movies. Also, there is a yellow sofa and a red rug. My favorite color is red. My house has a library and an office. The kitchen is very big because I like to cook. I live with my husband, my kids, and my dog. My house is tranquil.

Welcome to SpanishDict, Laurenh. Please add the English as well. This will aid the member trying to help you. - rac1, Mar 26, 2016

Thanks for the tip! - Laurenh808, Mar 26, 2016

Welcome. Can you add your language level in Spanish and English to your profile? Auto correct has got miró, it should be miro as it is present tense. - Mardle, Mar 26, 2016

Answer 1

This composition is pretty good, only a few errors. I have put my corrections in bold

Mi casa ideal es muy grande y bonita. Mi casa está en Hawai. El océano está cerca de mi casa. En mi casa hay cinco alcobas y tres baños. Yo quiero una piscina y un patio con plantas verdes. Me gustan el sol y el aire fresco. Mi casa tiene un comedor donde cena mi familia. El comedor tiene diez sillas. En la sala hay un televisor porque miro muchas películas. También hay un sofá amarillo y una alfombra roja. Mi color favorito es rojo. Mi casa tiene una biblioteca y una oficina. La cocina es muy grande porque me gusta cocinar. Vivo con mi esposo, mis hermanos, y mi perro. Mi casa es tranquila.

There is much more in terms of style that I as a native speaker would add, but I'm leaving it in this simple beginner style, because I believe that's what your teacher would prefer.

And please fill out your profile giving gender and levels of English and Spanish. - Daniela2041, Mar 26, 2016

"mis hermanos" should be "mis niños" - jtaniel, Mar 26, 2016

"muy grande" should be "grande" to match the English - jtaniel, Mar 26, 2016

"Yo quiero" should probably be "Quiero" - especially since you don't say "Yo vivo" later - jtaniel, Mar 26, 2016

Hola Dani, fíjate que "el sol" es una sola cosa así es que "gustar" debería ser singular, pues lo del "aire fresco" es una frase aparte aunque sí las dos frases pueden compartir el verbo "gustar", o sea "me gusta tanto y tanto" - 005faa61, Mar 26, 2016

The only real mistake which I missed could be the "hermanos" but maybe she's not married yet, so I let it be. My use of "gustar" is correct. I didn't bother to read the English, so "grande" vs. "muy grande" no importa. - Daniela2041, Mar 26, 2016

What do you mean by correcting 'hermanos'? Do you mean that she's living with her children and not her brothers? - LiuBang10, Mar 28, 2016

Thank you very much for the help everyone! Just to clarify in case you were confused I am not married nor do I have kids so I put mi esposo and mis hermanos just to add more people to my imaginary household. - Laurenh808, Mar 30, 2016