Corrección de estrofas 1.0
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Gracias a todos por tomarse el tiempo para editar la estrofa.
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updated Jan 16, 2016
edited by joapr
posted by joapr
You are fluent in both English and Spanish , put in the English translation and see what happens. - ray76, Jan 15, 2016
I doubt the fluency part. There are several things here that a fluent person wouldn't have done. Shucks, my second semester students wouldn't make these errors. - Daniela2041, Jan 15, 2016
I don't know why someone would label themselves as fluent when they aren't, Dani, but "by their fruits you shall know them" ne c'est pas? - Jubilado, Jan 15, 2016
I think it agood effort actually, but then I don't read the profiles, or , very rarely. - annierats, Jan 15, 2016
Hey everyone! So, I am not fluent? :( Almost everyone I talk to think I am fluent. - joapr, Jan 16, 2016
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For me JulianChivi way is not correct. My proposal:
Odiaba explorar el mundo
pero es imposible evitarlo.
Comencé el día con malos pensamientos
no me sorprendió pasar el día agotado.
updated Jan 16, 2016
edited by txustaboy
posted by txustaboy
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Odiaba explorar el mundo,
pero es imposible evitarlo. (no "de")
Comencé el día con mal pensamiento
no me sorprendí pasarme el día agotado. (no "de") (if your nuance is passing the day worn out, then say: "sorprendió" and "sorprendí" if you surprised yourself)
updated Jan 16, 2016
edited by 005faa61
posted by 005faa61
I made a mistake on the first verse and it´s now corrected, maybe txustaboy refers to this. Our other differences are a matter of desired nuance of the writer - 005faa61, Jan 15, 2016
Gracias JulianChivi. - joapr, Jan 16, 2016
