Proofread 1

Question

Hello SpanishDict Community,

Here is my original poem and I would like you guys to see if there are any more errors in this poem. To make it clear, I only want you guys to Proofread. Thank you:

You must include the English translation in order to understand if you have it correct. This is a very big ask mate. - ray76, Jan 9, 2016

Answer 1

I like reading poetry - I would want to refer to un pensamiento negativo or plural without an article. However, though my Spanish is good enough to read Spanish my construction often leans to English grammar. In any event in a poem the sense and the sound is more compelling than the grammar.

Are you aiming at people in Spain or other Spanish speaking countries?

As you are asking for help/input I assume your English is more instinctive than your Spanish. As you rate your proficiency in both languages as fluent I am surprised you haven't asked your question in Spanish.

Buena suerte

I now have a credibility gap with joapr. I think he may be very advanced in Spanish and perhaps functions with ease in a Spanish speaking environment, my parameter for fluent equals native speaker. - Jubilado, Jan 9, 2016

no one explains how you should rate yourself I am just surprised if he is fluent why he did't ask in Spanish or just ask for suggestions on a line or phrase he wanted toimprove. - Mardle, Jan 9, 2016

though I agree many people who are verbally fluent believe their written work needs improvement. - Mardle, Jan 9, 2016

Yes, Mardle, you are correct. I know I have a very strict definition of fluent which would include listening, speaking, reading and writing. I must admit that in listening and writing I am not advanced as in the other two. - Jubilado, Jan 9, 2016

This is the second poem this person has asked for proofreading , last time Julian Chivy requested the English translation otherwise it could not be done. - ray76, Jan 10, 2016