I need help with muy english composition! Thanks.
Hola a todos: os presento mi redacción sobre como estar seguro seguro en un paseo por la montaña. Os agradecería que me indicaseis los posibles errores que haya para poder corregirlos y no cometerlos en el examen.
Gracias por adelantado 
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TOPIC :How to keep sake If you go walking in the mountains
You probably think that mountains are a beautiful place to visit and see due to their breathtaking view.
In spite of the fact, the mountains are a dangerous and unsafety place if you don't pay attention to the risk.
Here are some tips to prevent mountain accidents. First, look at map and trace a safe route. You should be careful wilth the paths, many of them are not usable because of this you could fall down on the rocks and hurt yourself.
The next thing is your clothes. You need wears a special clothes. That means, You should dress comfortable clothes which are made of resistant and warm materials like leather, cotton, lycra, for instance.
In addition to to this, remember to wear a backpack where you put everything you need like food, drinks and one of the most important thimgs, mountain utensils as a rape or a string.
Finally, make sure you go walking in the mountain with someone who was an expert mountaineer. He knows the mountains very well so, it's less easier to miss you.
If you follow these simple advises, keep safe while you're walking in the mountains will be an easy thing and you won't be at risk in that place.
Thank you for reading my composition.
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Muchas gracias por la corrección. El texto es una redacción hecha por mi misma siguiendo uno de los temas del libro. En el examen tengo que hacer una redacción sobre el tema que se me indique cosa que nos nos dicen. Como aún no poseo un nivel de inglés muy alto necesito que alguien me ayude a ver los posibles errores y así no cometerlo en el futuro.
Thank you very much for the correction. The text is a composition made ??by myself using one of the thopicsof the book . In my English exam i have to do an essay about a topic who the theachers prepare for his students. I don't know the topic which enter in the exam. As yet I do not have a level of English high I need someone to help me see the possible mistakes and avoid committing them in the future.
Hi Noelia Welcome to the forum. Can you mark on your profile your level of English? I assume you are a native Spanish speaker, if so you can add fluent by Spanish. The sharing of that information will help anyone who wants to help you. Is this a piece that your teacher will correct or are you teaching yourself for an exam?
It is important to reread pieces and correct errors of spelling and phrasing
"I need help with muy english composition" muy = my [typing mistake] english = English - we use capitals more often than used in Spanish May be better to say 'Please help with my English composition' "TOPIC :How to keep safe If you go walking in the mountains
You probably think that mountains are a beautiful place to visit and see due to their breathtaking view." You probably think that the mountains are beautiful places to visit - plural sounds better here. Either mountains are beautiful places to visit due to their breathtaking views or and see their breathtaking views Instead of see I would put 'admire' or 'enjoy'
Can you put what you want to say in Spanish as a guide? We learn from reading good Spanish and it makes it easier to guide your English
