Please Could someone proofread this paragraph for me? It would be much appreciated :))

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Hi I'm Katherine and I am currently preparing a card for a mock a level oral next week. Please could someone proofread this, Thankyouu.

Se trata de las razones para que la gente no hace deporte incluyendo la débil excusa de no estar interesado.

It's about the reasons for people not doing sport, including the weak excuse of not being interested.

Hi Kat...please take a moment to add your language proficiency to your profile. - rac1, Mar 31, 2015

Answer 1

You don´t need an excuse to lack interest in something, so I would say it differently, ie: Se trata de las razones de que la gente no haga deportes incluyendo la causa de no estar interesada.

Yipee! I was just going to write it this way round when I read your answer, what satisfaction. - annierats, Mar 30, 2015

Je je, ¡ya somos tres! :-) - Manity, Mar 30, 2015

Thankyou so much :) this was really helpful - kat-kate32, Mar 31, 2015

Answer 2

Hello Kat,

Welcome to the SpanishDict forum

Having read it through, most of it appears fine to me ...apart from the use of para, because the preposition por is used when referring to a reason or cause of action. I would suggest the use of por in place of para.

Se trata de las razones por las que la gente no hace deporte incluyendo la débil excusa de no estar interesado.

I consulted a chart created by a native speaker called Heidita who used to come here, in order to double-check my answer! The chart was attached to one of the practice, grammar exercises she used to give us!

I hope this helps.

I am not a native speaker so you may wish to wait for further confirmation before making any changes to your text/speech!

I agree with you, Feliz. But I would say: "de las razones por las que... ". - LuisCache, Mar 30, 2015

Muchas gracias por tu corrección, Luis :) - FELIZ77, Mar 30, 2015

De nada, Feliz! Saludos! - LuisCache, Mar 30, 2015