is this correct? i need help for spanish class

Question

Spring break is a very fun time to do very interesting things that you could only dare to do. Paul and Carlos are planning on having the best yet. After school Paul meets up with Carlos and asks him how do you feel about going to Brazil for spring break? Carlos responds l would love to. Paul then asks when are you available to go with me? Carlos says I can on March 36, 2015. They then go to their own houses to start packing. Carlos wants to wear something fancier but Paul tells him that they will be killed for the clothes. They then arrive at the airport.

After arriving at the airport they get on their plane and take the long journey to Brazil. The flight attendant comes by and asks Paul what he would like to eat? Paul responds with I would like carrots and lobster. She then asks Carlos what he would like to eat? Carlos responds with I do not want nothing. The airplane arrives at the airport at 5:76 and they get off and grab a taxi and head to a soccer game.

Finally they arrive at the soccer game which is the biggest in history. The game is between real Madrid and Bayern Munich. They go to find their seats but their seats have been taken, so they ask the person in them can they move? He responds with sorry I can’t. This makes Paul mad and wants to fight him he then asks do you want to fight me? The guy in the seat says o I don’t fight girls. So this makes them mad and they leave the game

now the spanish version Vacaciones de primavera es muy divertido hacer cosas muy interesantes que usted sólo podría atreverse a hacer. Paul y Carlos están planeando tener el mejor todavía. Después de la escuela Paul se reúne con Carlos y le pregunta ¿qué piensas acerca de ir a Brasil de vacaciones? Carlos responde me encantaría. ¿Paul le preguntará cuando estás disponible para ir conmigo? Carlos dicen que pueda en marcha de 36, 2015. Luego van a sus casas para comenzar a empacar. Carlos quiere llevar algo más elegante pero Paul le dice que matarán para la ropa. Entonces llegan al aeropuerto.

Después de llegar al aeropuerto consiguen en su avión y hacer el largo viaje a Brasil. ¿La azafata viene y pide a Paul que le gustaría comer? Paul responde con que quisiera zanahorias y langosta. ¿Entonces preguntó a Carlos que le gustaría comer? Carlos responde con que no quiero nada. El avión llega al aeropuerto en 5:76 y bajarse y tomar un taxi y a un partido de fútbol.

Finalmente llegan al partido de fútbol que es el más grande en la historia. El juego es entre real Madrid y Bayern Munich. ¿Van a encontrar sus asientos pero han tomado sus asientos, así que piden a la persona en ellos puede se mueven? Responde con lo siento que no puedo. Esto enfurece a Paul y quiere pelear con él que entonces pregunta ¿quieres pelear conmigo? El hombre en el asiento dice o no peleo con las chicas. Así que esto les hace enojar y dejan el juego

Welcome mate and best of luck from OZ. - ray76, Mar 27, 2015

You need to use proper capitalization at all times. - rac1, Mar 27, 2015

wait did you check it at least ? I mean 'March' was translated as 'marcha', 'Carlos' is singular and 'diceN' is plural o.O - Pablo064, Mar 28, 2015

Ryan , we have members learning English , therefore it is important to capitalise , your heading needs editing mate. - ray76, Mar 30, 2015

Answer 1

Welcome to the forum. It is a well written piece for someone who has just started Spanish. The comments about using capitals etc is because many people here are learning English and some are learning English and Spanish. We do not want them misled into thinking they do not need a capital 'I' whenever you use the English for yo. In your first paragraph you have put 'March 36' is that deliberate? When you have Carlos replying 'I don't want nothing' have you deliberately written it that way? When someone asks Carlos what he wants to eat you have written 'I do not want nothing' Some people say that but he is more likely to say 'Nothing thanks' or 'I don't want anything' You can see that tiempo has asked if you checked your Spanish. He is a native Spanish speaker and helpful but if you have made minor errors it looks like you don't want to make the effort to check it yourself. You need to check that adjectives agree with the subject/verbs are the correct tense and person and just reread. 'Marcha' is a Spanish word but it is not the word for March.

We do want to help - if the time for handing the work in has passed and you don't want corrections as your teacher will do it - let us know.

You are still welcome and we look forward to further questions and posts

¡Buena suerteí