My English text(please correct any mistakes)

Question

Hi there, would you please profread the text below? I really appreciate your attention Thanks in advance, here is the text:

"I can't stand this situation anymore, My heart... Oh my heart is now just like a biiig puzzle since it has broken to many parts of misery... I wanna get rid of some people & put them out of my heaven of peace... One day I may leave this disgusting town with all its lies, treasons, jealousies, disturbs & darn weather whose autumn belongs only to my rains of tear & winter to my huge avalanches of bad adventures. I'm too lonely to take a hand & too exhausted to stay in here. I may fly to my dreams by attempt wings... One day... I used to forgive & forget. Now, it's time neither forgive, nor forget. I love my twenty thus, it's time to live my own life. No need to permit anyone, I have the permission of the Lord/"

Amigo - this is a very adventurous text in a foreign language. Well done! I would try but I am not sure what it is you want to convey in some places. - ian-hill, Jan 28, 2015

thanks my fiend - caballer0, Jan 28, 2015

De nada amigo. - ian-hill, Jan 28, 2015

Answer 1

"I can't stand this situation anymore, My heart ...oh my heart ...it is like a big puzzle that is broken into many miserable pieces. I want to get rid of some people and put them out of my heaven of peace [I don’t know what this means] One day I may leave this disgusting town with all its lies, treason, and jealousy––along with its horrible weather whose autumn belongs only to (my rains of tear & winter to my huge avalanches of bad adventures [I don’t know what you are trying to say here]). I'm too lonely to take a stand and too exhausted to stay here. I may fly to my dreams by attempt wings [I don’t know what this is supposed to mean] one day. I used to forgive and forget; now it's time neither to forgive, nor to forget. I love my twenty [I don’t know what this is supposed to mean] thus, it's time to live my own life. I don't need anyone’s permission; I have the permission of the Lord”

How can I ever thank you? - caballer0, Jan 28, 2015

Sorry but in some places (where I wrote in brackets [ ]) I didn't know what you were trying to say. - mdw1, Jan 28, 2015

Have a vote for trying. :) - ian-hill, Jan 28, 2015

Oh and welcome to SD. Your SD profile would be interesting to see. - ian-hill, Jan 28, 2015

¡Bien hecho! - rac1, Jan 28, 2015