A day at the beach
Please, correct my English mistakes, thanks.
last sunday I went to the beach in the afternoon, It was a very good experience, I went with my mother, my brothers and my nephew. We catched a bus at about 2:30 pm, we thought it was already late, but it was still early,actually. When we arrived in the beach, it was a bit cold, at least I felt that, it was a bit cloudy, but we jumped into the cold water. The waves seemed very dangerous, there was a red flag which was a sign that the sea was brave. In fact, the waves came very high, turbulent and swirling. In despite of that situation we kept swimming and enjoying the potentially dangerous waves, and we did not care about anything. We got scared when a man was about to drown because he went deeply into the dangerous waves of the sea, fortunately there were life guards who realized and at once jumped into the sea to save the poor man. After that, we were more careful, but we kept in the water. Then, we played soccer for a while until it was dusk. Finally, we went back home very tired. It was definitely a day to remember.
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My corrections, I am sure others would make slightly different changes. My English is from the United States:
Last Sunday I went to the beach in the afternoon. It was a very good experience. I went with my mother, my brothers and my nephew. We caught a bus at about 2:30 pm; we thought it was already late, but it was still early, actually. When we arrived at the beach, it was a bit cold, at least I felt that it was, and it was a bit cloudy, but we jumped into the cold water anyway. The waves seemed very dangerous; there was a red flag, which was a sign that the sea was rough. In fact, the waves were very high, turbulent and swirling. In spite of that situation we kept swimming and enjoying the potentially dangerous waves, and we did not care about anything. We got scared when a man was about to drown because he went deep into the dangerous waves of the sea. Fortunately there were life guards who realized it and at once jumped into the sea to save the poor man. After that, we were more careful, but we stayed in the water. Then, we played soccer for a while until it was dusk. Finally, we went back home very tired. It was definitely a day to remember.
The changes I made were mostly quite subtle, and I think overall you did a very good job.
¡Hola!, Karl180:
Here is another rewrite of your paragraph. While correcting your mistakes I also made some style changes that I thought would give your work a more natural English language sound and flow. Here is what I did: (your work is in italics and mine is bolded)
"last sunday I went to the beach in the afternoon, It was a very good experience, I went with my mother,
Last Sunday afternoon I went to the beach. It was a great experience. I went with my mother,
my brothers and my nephew. We catched a bus at about 2:30 pm, we thought it was already late, but it
brothers and nephew. We caught a bus at about 2:30. Although we thought the bus was late, it
was still early,actually. When we arrived in the beach, it was a bit cold, at least I felt that, it was a bit
was actually early. When we arrived at the beach I felt that it was cold and it was a bit
cloudy, but we jumped into the cold water. The waves seemed very dangerous, there was a red flag
cloudy but we jumped into the cold water anyway. The waves seemed very dangerous and there was a red flag
which was a sign that the sea was brave. In fact, the waves came very high, turbulent and swirling. In
as a sign that the sea was rough. In fact, the waves were very high, turbulent and swirling.
despite of that situation we kept swimming and enjoying the potentially dangerous waves, and we did
In spite of the waves we kept swimming, enjoying the potential danger and we were
not care about anything. We got scared when a man was about to drown because he went deeply into
carefree. We were scared when a man nearly drowned because he went out too far into
the dangerous waves of the sea, fortunately there were life guards who realized and at once jumped
the dangerous waves. Fortunately the lifeguards quickly realized the crisis and at once jumped
into the sea to save the poor man. After that, we were more careful, but we kept in the water. Then, we
into the sea to save the poor man. After that we were more careful but still stayed in the water. Then we
played soccer for a while until it was dusk. Finally, we went back home very tired. It was definitely a day
played soccer for a while until dusk. Finally we returned home very tired. It was definitely a
to remember
memorable day.
Best wishes/Saludos,
Moe
now I invict you to do the translation in Spanish
I assume that is invite- here is my try, my guess that it is not quite as good as your English:
El domingo pasado, fui a la playa por la tarde. Era una experiencia muy buena. Fui con mi madre, mis hermanos, y mi sobrino. Cogimos/tomamos un autobús a las dos y media más o menos. Pensábamos que ya era tarde, pero todavía era temprano de verdad. Cuando llegamos a la playa, hace un poco de frío, por lo menos sentí así, y había unas pocas nubes, pero saltamos al agua fría. Las olas parecían muy peligrosas. Había una bandera roja, la cual era un signo que el mar era bravo. De hecho, las olas venían muy altas, turbulentas, y arremolinadas. A pesar de esa situación seguimos nadando y disfrutando de las olas potencialmente peligrosas, y no cuidábamos de nada. Nos asustamos cuando un hombre estaba a punto de ahogarse debido a ir en las profundidades de las olas peligrosas del mar. Por suerte, hay socorristas que se lo dieron cuenta y inmediatamente saltaron al mar para salvar el hombre pobre. Después de eso, tenemos más cuidado, pero nos quedamos en el agua. Luego, jugamos al fútbol por un rato hasta el atardecer. Por fin, regresamos a casa muy cansados. Sin duda era un día para recordar.
So, Karl, exactly what is it you want us to do here. Translate all that? No way José. Our Spanish experts will gladly correct anything you do. But ya GOTTA do something!
OK-- Edit your post and tell us something about what you want. It would also be a good idea to fill in your proflie so we can learn how much Spanish you know already. OK bien,He visto tu perfil, y dices que hablas español corrientemente. Pero todavía no sé qué deseas aquí.
