closing conclusion

Question

I try to close a paragraph about how I just came home from a restaurante with my family

Tengo mucho divertido en mi noche. Voy casa y estoy cansado. Tengo sobrante de pastel, sushi, y desierto. Necesito tomar todos regalos del fiesta. Cuando relejamos, nosotros congregamos la chimenea y hablamos hasta dormimos. Tengo un gran tiempo

Answer 1

Tengo mucho divertido en mi noche. Voy casa y estoy cansado. Tengo sobrante de pastel, sushi, y desierto. Necesito tomar todos regalos del fiesta. Cuando relejamos, nosotros congregamos la chimenea y hablamos hasta dormimos. Tengo un gran tiempo.

Fue una noche muy divertida. Cuando me fui a casa estaba cansado. Me quedé con las sobras del pastel, del sushi y del postre. Quería utilizar/coger/abrir todos los regalos de la fiesta. Cuando nos relajamos, nos reunimos alrededor de la chimenea, y estuvimos hablando hasta que nos quedamos dormidos. Fué un gran día.

Instead of "fué un gran día" prefiero "pasé un buen rato." Nothing wrong with what you said, but I think the questioner meant "I had a good time" - Daniela2041, Dec 12, 2014

Answer 2

Firstly, most of this paragraph is written in the present tense, when it should be in the preterite tense. The first sentence should be "Tuve mucha diversión está noche". The sentence now says, "I had a lot of fun tonight". "Divertido" is an adjective, you must use a noun in that case, therefore "diversión".

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Next, the next sentence says, "Voy casa y estoy cansado". This reads, "I go home and I am sleepy". However, if you wanted to say, "I am going home and I am sleepy", with "am going" currently, or if you wanted to say, "I went home and I was sleepy". For the former you would say, "Estoy yendo a mi casa y estoy cansado". For the latter, you would say, "Fui a mi casa y estuve cansado".

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"Tengo sobrante de pastel, sushi, y desierto." This sentence has several things incorrect. First, the tense is wrong again, you need to use the preterite. "Tuve" is the word for "I had". Next, "sobrante de pastel" means "leftover cake", if this is what you meant to say, then it's fine. "Sushi" is correct, and "desierto" means desert, "postre" is the word for dessert. The correct sentence would be: "Tuve sobrante de pastel, sushi y postre". You never use a comma between the second-to-last item in a list and the conjunction (and, or, nor).

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"Necesito tomar todos regalos del fiesta." This says, "I need to take all party gifts", now, this sentence is unclear. Please describe what you wish to say in English.

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"Cuando relejamos, nosotros congregamos la chimenea y hablamos hasta dormimos." This says, "When we reflect, we gather together the chimney and we speak until we sleep." Please clarify the meaning,

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The last sentence should be "Tuve un gran tiempo."

Welcome to SpanishDict. - rac1, Dec 12, 2014

Jbennett, on the comma thing, is that a Spanish rule? I ask because I was taught differently in English. Thanks! - Winkfish, Dec 12, 2014

Jbennet, I´m Spanish and the sentence "Tuve un gran tiempo" does not have that meaning for me, I would say "Pase un buen rato" o "Fue un buen día". - txustaboy, Dec 12, 2014

Jbennet: The sentence "a mi casa y estuve cansado" is terrible!!! What kind of verbal tense is it? You HAVE to say "Me fui a casa y (porque) estaba cansado". - txustaboy, Dec 12, 2014

Winkfish: Yes, it is a Spanish rule: A, B, C y D. There is no comma between the C and the "y" - txustaboy, Dec 12, 2014

Thanks, tx!! - Winkfish, Dec 12, 2014