Birthday card - Please check my translation

Question

Hi, I would like to write the following in a birthday card in Spanish. Is my translation correct?

"Dear Paul, Happy birthday! I hope you have a very special day with your family. I will be thinking of you and I wish I could be there with you. With love and kisses,"

"Querido Paul, Feliz cumpleaños! Espero que tengas un día muy especial con su familia. Pensaré en usted y deseos yo era contigo. Con amor y besos,"

Welcome to SD - please complete your SD profile - it helps us help you - Gracias. - ian-hill, Oct 13, 2014

THe translattion looks ok to me - but wait for a native speaker to answer. :) - ian-hill, Oct 13, 2014

Answer 1

Mis sugerencias:

Querido Paul, ¡Feliz cumpleaños! Espero que tengas/pases un día muy especial con tu familia/junto a tu familia. Pensaré en ti /Estaré pensando en ti/Me acordaré mucho de ti). Ojalá pudiera estar contigo/allí. Con amor y besos,

:) - ian-hill, Oct 13, 2014

Have a vote amiga :) - ian-hill, Oct 13, 2014

Gracias. :) - Cordobesa, Oct 13, 2014

:) - FELIZ77, Oct 14, 2014

Answer 2

"Dear Paul, Happy birthday! I hope you have a very special day with your family. I will be thinking of you and I wish I could be there with you. With love and kisses,"

"Querido Paul, Feliz cumpleaños! Espero que tengas un día muy especial con su familia. Pensaré en usted y deseos yo era contigo. Con amor y besos,"

Cordobesa has given you a wonderful answer using the familiar tu form which is the most common form in Spain when talking to friends and close family, but if you would prefer to use the Ud form that they use in Latin America, I would just suggest you make the following corrections to adapt it to your needs:

1.Estaré pensando en Ud 2. Ojalá pudiera estar con Ud/allí o quisiera que pudiera estar con Ud.

I hope this helps

Corrijan mi español, por favor