spanish Essay... Someone please help

Question

I have to write a essay Are you a person driven to achieve, make A’s, get the best job, etc.? Are you someone who is more laid back, taking things as they come? What can you tell someone about yourself that would make him or her conclude that you live to work or work to live? Provide the details of your life that support your claim.

I have written this so far:

If some can help me proofread that would be great... and i need 20-30 more words but not sure what to induce if you could help me with that it would be really appricated.

Yo soy un trabajador motivado porque yo quiero excelencia y dinero. No soy bueno tomar en los exmenes, pero yo trabajo duro en la escuela. Mi motivacin es porque mi familia no tiene dinero para mis hermanos y yo. Yo quiero hijos en mi familia no les preocupes por dinero. Yo vivo por trabajo todos los das

Please complete your profile information as it pertains to language. Thanks. - rac1, Jul 10, 2014

Please fill out your profile so that we may better help you . Bienvenido y buena suerte amiga. - ray76, Jul 12, 2014

Answer 1

Yo soy un trabajador motivado porque soy muy perfeccionista y me gusta la excelencia.

Trabajo mucho en mis estudios, aunque algunas veces los resultados no son tan buenos como me gustaría.

Mi motivación es debido fundamentalmente porque procedo de una familia humilde, y mis padres no tienen el dinero suficiente parar mantener a mis hermanos y a mi.

En un futuro, me gustaría tener hijos y que no se tuvieran que preocupar por el dinero. Es por todo ello, que trabajo muy duro todos los dias.

Muchas gracias amigo :)♥ - rac1, Jul 10, 2014

Answer 2

I have tried to answer this but my internet keeps failing! From your English I assume you are a native speaker in a hurry as you have made spelling/typing errors in your English and left words out- this makes it difficult for those learning English. I had intended to suggest you reread your essay to correct spelling mistakes and make sure verb endings agree with the subject.Iliones has now written the essay for you. You have not indicated your level of Spanish but as the essay question is not in Spanish I suspect you will not have learned the subjunctive yet. I guess the essay is due tomorrow- I have been in that situation - at the moment you must be relieved- but in the long run you will learn more if you put in more effort and use the forum for things you do not understand. It is a good idea to ask your teacher! Do note Iliones has used the subjunctive - if you have not learned it yet your teacher will be very impressed or smell a rat!

Buena suerte

Answer 3

Welcome to SpanishDict. We will help by proofreading and offering suggestions, if need be. However, we won't give you 20 or 30 more words. You will need to do that and post it here, in this thread. No need to open another one.

:) - ian-hill, Jul 10, 2014

Would be really appreciated if you can proofread it for me. - 00e1a82e, Jul 10, 2014

I would suggest that you add the English version so we can see exactly what you mean to say. - rac1, Jul 10, 2014