Short translation excercise for Spanish learners
I was reading a lovely book of poetry by Jaime Torres Bodet and discovered this beautiful romantic poem.
The poem goes like this:
" No nos diremos nada, Cerraremos las puertas, deshojaremos rosas sobre el lecho vacío , y besaré en el hueco de sus manos abiertas, la dulzura del mundo,que se va, como un río."
As you look to translate this, think of the "color" of it and try to keep that.
Since you natives already know this please let us learners see what we can do with this first.
A vote for all who try the translation. Best answer for the best translation. I will post my translation at the end of the thread---- Enjoy !
As always please advise of any typos or errors you may see
7 Answers
¡Hola!, Paco:
Here is my attempt:
| No nos diremos nada, | We'll not say anything, |
| Cerraremos las puertas, | We'll lock the doors, |
| Deshojaremos rosas sobre el lecho vacío, y | We'll spread rose petals on the empty bed, and |
| Besaré en el hueco de sus manos abiertas, | I'll kiss the palms of your open hands. |
| La dulzura del mundo,que se va, como un río. | The sweetness of the world will flow over us like a river. |
We will not say anything. We will close the doors, and pluck roses on the empty bed, and kiss in the hollow of our open hands, the sweetness/ gentleness of the world, that flows like a river.
I tried to think in color, but I was having trouble with the word "deshojaremos".
Say nothing, close the doors pull the petals off the roses on to the empty bed and kiss on the emptiness of our hands open like the sweetness of world that like a river.
Here is my translation of the poem.
we do not speak, we close the doors, we cast rose petals opon the empty bed. And there I drink from the hollow of your open hands the sweet river of life that flows away like a river.
We wont speak, we'll close our doors, and I'll kiss your empty open arms, the world's sweetness that runs like a river.
Correction from Paco:
We wont speak, we'll close our doors, and I'll kiss your empty open hands, the world's sweetness that runs like a river.
No nos diremos nada, Cerraremos las puertas, deshojaremos rosas sobre el lecho vacío , y besaré en el hueco de sus manos abiertas, la dulzura del mundo,que se va, como un río.
Voy a tratar de traducir este texto:
"We will not say anything, we will lock the doors, eat roses out of hours on the empty bed and I will you kiss you in the palms (lit: hollows) of your open hands, allowing the sweetness of the world to flow like a river."
No tengo mucha experiencia en traducir canciones, películas y otras tipos de literatura idiomática. ¡He tratado de hacer lo puedo posible! (I have tried to do my best!)
Thank you all for your interpretations of this poem. For me it is the heart of a romantic. Of course literary liscence is acceptable in poetry. Bien hecho a todos !!!!
