Please proofread the sentence!

Question

I am nearly finished my piece and this is the last little bit. I have learned the rules of this forum and I hope you can help me by correcting this. I need the Spanish corrected! I have wrote the English followed by my Spanish translation(the bold):

As well as this, I would love to become a sports coach therefore I can't take drugs or drink alcohol as it will set a bad example. 'Además, me encantaría ser un coach de deportes por lo tanto no puedo tomar drogas o bebidas alcohólicas como establecerá un mal ejemplo.'

If I could lead my country then I would ban cigarettes given that they will be bad for your lungs. 'Si yo pudiera llevar a mi país, me iba a prohibir los cigarrillos que será malo para los pulmones.'

In the future I am going to stop eating snacks because I am sure that they make me put on weight. 'En el futuro voy a dejar de comer bocadillos porque estoy seguro de que me hacen subir de peso'.'

For breakfast I used to eat; cereal with milk, for supper I used to eat; a sandwich with jam in and for dinner I used to eat; chicken with gravy and potatoes. 'Para el desayuno solía comer; cereales con leche, para la cena que solía comer; un sándwich con mermelada en y para la cena solía comer; pollo con salsa y patatas.'

Thanks all for the help!! I filled in my profile to say I am fluent in English and a beginner in Spanish. I am a boy Estoy un chico

thanks for filling it in! :) - actorgirl, Mar 28, 2014

"I have written the English" "sandwich with jam on " An excellent try James , you have shown all the newbies that one can "give it a go" and succeed , if I was your dad I would be as proud as a Peacock of you . Well done mate ! - ray76, Mar 28, 2014

James I am trying to find someone who can help you with your Spanish , but you can post your questions here and as long as you make an attempt , ( as you have done0 there will be many that will correct your work. - ray76, Mar 28, 2014

Answer 1

'Además, me encantaría ser coach de deportes; por lo tanto, no puedo tomar drogas o bebidas alcohólicas porque daría un mal ejemplo.'

'Si pudiera gobernar el país, prohibiría los cigarrillos porque son malos para los pulmones.'

'En el futuro voy a dejar de comer bocadillos porque estoy seguro de que me hacen subir de peso'.

'Para el desayuno solía comer cereales con leche; para la cena, un sándwich con mermelada, y para la cena, pollo con salsa y patatas.' *

*No es necesario repetir "solía comer"

Salu2!

Thanks mate , well done. - ray76, Mar 29, 2014

Answer 2

I must highly commend this young guy "Spanishwannabe" he has made an enormous

effort and needs our help . I love to see young people that are willing to give it a go,

and have a great desire and willingness to succeed , we must all of us champion

such young people , they are our future teachers and leaders .