If there are any errors can they please be corrected.
Muchos jóvenes practican deportes como el fútbol, el cricket y el baloncesto que los mantiene en forma. Sin embargo muchos jóvenes practican deportes una vez al día, lo cual no es suficiente. No es un montón de adolescentes ir al gimnasio, esto podría ser una de las razones de por qué la obesidad está en aumento. La cantidad de personas que fuman ha disminuido enormemente, pero el consumo de drogas ha aumentado, lo que es un problema. Las drogas y el alcohol es un gran problema en la sociedad, ya que podría causar daños permanentes e incluso la muerte. En los últimos medicamentos donde no se usa tanto como lo hacen ahora. Creo que debemos crear clubes donde los jóvenes pueden ir a jugar diferentes deportes, esto los mantendrá sanos y también, y hacer que se queden lejos de las drogas. Es importante que hagamos algo hoy para ayudar al futuro como el futuro no se ve bien.
Many young people play sports such as football, cricket and basketball which keeps them fit. However many young people play sports once a day which is not enough. Not a lot of teenagers go to gym, this could be one reason of why obesity is increasing. The amount of people that smoke has decreased massively but drug usage has increased which is a problem. Drugs and alcohol is a big issue in the society as it could cause permanent damage and even death. In the past drugs where no used as much as they do now. I believe we should create clubs where young people can go and play different sports, this will keep them healthy and also and make them stay away from drugs. It is important that we do something today to help the future as the future does not look good.
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I'll check the English one:
Many young people play sports such as football, cricket and basketball which keeps them fit. However, many young people play sports once a day which is not enough. Few teenagers go to gym; this could be a reason of why obesity is increasing in frequency/on the rise. The amount of people that smoke has decreased massively but drug usage has increased which is a problem. Drugs and alcohol addiction (just one way of wording it) is a big issue in the society as it can cause permanent damage and even death. In the past drugs were not used as much as they are now. I believe we should create clubs where young people can go and play different sports. This will keep them healthy and also also keep them away from drugs. It is important that we do something today to help the future as the future does not look good.
This has nothing to do with grammar or proofreading, but the last sentence could drive the point home in more style. You might want to have something like 'before it is too late'. Crisp and strikes the reader right in the spleen, Boom.
Regarding the Spanish (which you seem to be very good at, from a cursory glance):
Las drogas y el alcohol es un gran problema -> Shouldn't it be 'son', or can you group stuff together into a category and use 'es'?
Muchos jóvenes practican deportes como el fútbol, el cricket y el baloncesto, los cuales mantienen en forma a uno. Sin embargo muchos jóvenes practican deportes solamente una vez al día, lo cual no es suficiente. Hay pocos adolescentes que van al gimnasio, esto podría ser una de las razones de que la obesidad esté en aumento. La cantidad de personas que fuman ha disminuido enormemente, pero el consumo de drogas ha aumentado, lo cual es un problema. Las drogas y el alcohol son un gran problema en la sociedad, ya que podrían causar daños permanentes e incluso la muerte. En el pasado las drogas no se usaban tanto como se usan ahora. Creo que debemos crear clubes donde los jóvenes pueden ir a jugar diferentes deportes, esto los mantendrá sanos y también lejos de las drogas. Es importante que hagamos algo hoy mismo para ayudar el futuro porque el futuro no se ve bien.
sorry at the end of the title i forgot to put Thank you. Thank you
