Please could someone translate my english writing relating to work experience?

Question

I conducted my work experience at Lloyds Pharmacy in Prettygate during the last week of the school term in July. Leading up to the summer, I had a clear picture as to where I wanted to carry out my weeks worth of experience in the workplace. I chose the pharmacy because my future career of interest involves a healthcare environment and I thought this would suit it perfectly.

On my first day I was of course relatively anxious about what the staff would be like, what they would have me do and most of all how long my lunch was going to last! However all of my worries had gone as soon as I met the lovely staff that I was going to be working with for that week. I met a lovely lady called Sandra who worked as a dispenser who quickly showed me the ropes and settled me in well with the building and its facilities.

I had heard of the dull and mundane tasks that other 15 year olds in my position had been through in previous years so I wasn’t expecting to be able to do everything. Especially so due to the fact it was a professional clinical environment where the lives of patients were practically in the hands of their pharmacists to deal them the correct medicines. But I was lucky enough to be given challenging as well as enjoyable tasks. Mainly handing out prescriptions to patients, dealing with confidential information of patients and writing up lists of out-going drugs to name a few.

Friday afternoon came around so quickly and I had had such an enjoyable as well as valuable week gaining insight into the life of a group of extremely intelligent and caring people. My favourite thing about working at the pharmacy was the connections you shared while speaking to all of the patients I met during the week. They can tell that we really do care about their concerns and that way they can confide in us to get to the root of the problem.

Answer 1

Here are a few thoughts:

Complete your profile so we can better understand the situation that you are writing from. Since you are asking for help with something written in English, one might guess that English is not your native language however, Prettygate is in the UK so I am quite unsure about that. In that light, the piece is very, very well written. The only part that I found a little off the mark was the opening phrase "I conducted my work experience." This comes across as a little too formal. Also, It would probably be good to explain why you needed to have that work experience. A requirement of the curriculum that you are in at school? Then you could say something like "I decided to or I had an opportunity to get that work experience at ..."

Best wishes for your future.

I'm asking for it to be translated into Spanish. English is my first language. It's to do with my Spanish study at present. Thank you. - PylinJ, Nov 8, 2013