Can someone check this for errors? Thanks. :)

Question

Estaba tan oscuro, oscuro. Obtuve el control de mi mente, con un esfuerzo que me dejó temblando. Como otras veces estaba en los sueños. Pasé segundos de esperando – no lo sé, algo y me volví ir. Un granulado sombría figura de dos dimensiones formado en frente de mí.

Answer 1

Amazing!! It is all correct, Muy Bien!! It is very deep letting me/ the reader know a very descriptive thing of why you were scared, what happened etc. did you write it yourself? It is very descriptive and well written!!!!

I sure did, should I add to it over the months? :D - Liquinn, May 27, 2013

Answer 2

I would like to see the English version of that. I don't think in Spanish is conveying what was thought in English.

What do you mean by that? - Liquinn, May 27, 2013

That it not so good Spanish. it is good in the sense that since you are a student... but, then I would like to know what you thought in ENglish to say that. So, is an English version coming up? :) - chileno, May 28, 2013

When did I mention English though? - Liquinn, May 28, 2013

Answer 3

Estaba muy oscuro. Obtuve el control de mi mente, con un esfuerzo que me dejó temblando. Como otras veces estaba en un sueños. Pasé unos segundos esperando – no lo sé, algo y me volví ir. Una granulada sombría figura de dos dimensiones formada en frente de mí.