Did I write this with correct use of grammar?

Question

Does this sound right?

Una vez perdí mis llaves que uso para abrir la puerta de mi casa. Yo tenía miedo y pregunté mis padres si tuvieran una llave adicional. Dijeron que no. Luego, me di cuenta que no había nadie que tuviera una llave adicional.

(This didnt really happen to me, I just made this up off the top of my head.)

Hi please complete your profile in order that your question can be best answered. - ray76, Feb 28, 2013

Sounds like a good idea to Ray. :) - ian-hill, Feb 28, 2013

Answer 1

Ok. Ray76, sinceramente, no veo nada malo en mi perfil. Y, por cierto, podría nativos responder a esta pregunta?

This looks pretty good, too. Is this you and your Dad's effort, Tickl, or just your own? - bandit51jd, Mar 1, 2013

Mi esfuerzo solo - 0080b918, Mar 1, 2013

Answer 2

¿Y estos chicos? ¿Eso es suficiente?

Your translation for "Is that enough" looks good to me. I am not sure about the first sentence, though. - bandit51jd, Mar 1, 2013

Answer 3

How about this guys? Does that suffice?

Perfecto - rac1, Mar 1, 2013

Yes! Thank you so much. - bandit51jd, Mar 1, 2013

Answer 4

Could you explain what exactly I have to do with my profile?

Answer 5

You can edit your profile by going to your profile page and next to your username is (edit).

The reason we ask for more information in any member profile is to get to know you better. Your level of English and Spanish and a short description of why you are studying English or Spanish is very helpful.

Something else that is helpful is to include your English for the English learners. For those who are studying Spanish, it's helpful to have the English to compare to the Spanish as they try to do the translation.

Is this close to what you wanted to convey in English:

Once I lost the keys that I use to open the door of my house. I was frighted and asked my parents if they had a spare key. They said no. Then, I realized that no one had a spare key.

Let's hope this poster does as asked. I won't respond to anyone who can't be bothered. - ian-hill, Feb 28, 2013

Answer 6

I'd say:

Una vez perdí las llaves de la puerta de mi casa. Tenía miedo y (I would say "así que" instead of "y") le pregunté mis padres si tenían una llave adicional. Dijeron que no. Luego me di cuenta de que no había nadie que tuviera una llave adicional.

Answer 7

Ok. Ray76, I honestly don't see anything wrong in my profile. And by the way, could natives answer this question?

We will answer when you complete your profile as bandit suggests. - ian-hill, Feb 28, 2013