One line correction please on relationships?

Question

Me llamo Gary Barlow, tengo cuarenta y dos años y estoy casada con Dawn Andrews, que es una bailarina, y tenemos tres hijos preciosos- un hermoso niño y dos niñas.

Could you please correct the grammar in the paragraph above. Thanks

Answer 1

Si sos un hombre, estas casado con Dawn Andrews, y no casada con ella.

Good catch. I don´t know how to explain missing that, other than that I´ve very good at missing things. - rogspax, Feb 22, 2013

Answer 2

It looks pretty good.

A couple comments. It´s a bit of a run-on sentence, so you might want to put a period after bailarina, and start a new sentence with Tenemos.

Also, in descriptions of what one does, such as job, Spanish generally omits the indefinite article before the title, so you could afford to lose the ´una´ before ´bailarina´.

Looks good overall. Any other suggestions would have to come from someone more advanced than I.

Bien hecho.