Can someone help me to correct this text for a resume?

Question

Can someone help me to correct this text for a resume? Is it grammatically correct? Should I shorten or exclude something?

*I hold the ownership of two processes created for metrics improvement and also collaborate with other process.

Regarding the two processes that I owned I was required to develop the project from scratch, worked on the process documentation, provide updates to management and other team peers, assume a 100% responsibility about any inquiry, meetings, training, execution, results and implementation of the outcome obtained from the processes.*

Answer 1

I hold the ownership of two processes created for metrics improvement and I also collaborated with other processes.

Regarding the two processes that I owned, I was required to develop the project from scratch, worked on the process documentation, provided updates to management and other team peers, and assumed 100% responsibility for any inquiry, meetings, training, execution, results and implementation of the outcome obtained from the processes.

Another English member may have better ideas.

Answer 2

I hold the ownership of two processes? This sounds un poco raro to my ear. Do you mean that you are a patent-holder? Do you have two patents? If so, you should say: “I am a patent-holder on two processes.” This is much more impressive anyway!

By the way, resume is a French word, and the correct spelling is résumé, not resumé, and not resume. Resume means to start something again. However, this word is frequently seen wrong on computer screens and in print because most people are too lazy to put the accent marks on it.

Thanks Brian, yes I want to say that I have always been the owner of the process.. I developed the process and worked on the implementation - Pablo04, Feb 12, 2013

Answer 3

I hold the ownership of two processes created for metrics improvement and also collaborated on other process.

Regarding the two processes that I own, I was required to develop the project from scratch, worked on the process documentation, provided updates to the management and other team peers, assumed a 100% responsibility regarding all inquiries, meetings, training, execution, results, as well as the implementation of the outcome of the processes.

(I don't think you should exclude anything, all information seems relevant. It's up to you to decide if you need to shorten it.)

Answer 4

to spanish or corect the english part?

correct the english part if something is wrong or does not look good - Pablo04, Feb 12, 2013