En la oscuridad - lyric translation
¡Hola a todos!
I got some music for my birthday recently, and I thought I would try my hand at some lyric translation. The first tune I picked was one I understood quite a bit of just by listening to it, and since I wanted to understand it in all of its salacious detail I decided to make it first on the list to translate...
Cultura Profetica - En la oscuridad
As you all will see, I got some of it, and completely missed or bumbled other parts. Please add your two cents on those areas that you feel need some improvement...
Lyrics:
En la oscuridad las sombras toman vida (In the darkness the shadows come to life) y la falta de colores crea imagenes escondidas, (and the lack of color creates hidden images) noche desabriga piel cautiva y yo a tu costilla, (Evening sheds it's cautious skin and I at your rib,) hipnotizado al mando de tu olor. (hypnotized at the command of your smell)
En la oscuridad se inchan los labios de la dicha, (In the darkness... something about blissful or happy lips) manos observan sin prisa, sonidos enfatizan (hands observe without hurry, sounds emphasize) y todo el viento nos trespasa y pasa (and all the wind trespasses and passes us) y la sensacion no acaba... tarda. (and the sensation does not finish... late)
En la oscuridad (In the darkness) abro surcos en mi pecho para que entre tu gracia. (I open grooves in my chest to be amongst your grace/in your favor) En mi tu techo, tu casa. (In me your roof, your house) Rico ritual de intimidad en la oscuridad (Rich ritual of intimacy in the darkness) pongo todo en el ritmo (I put everything in the rhythm) y del resto se encarga el instinto. (and instinct will take charge of the rest)
En la oscuridad me pongo de cuclillas (In the darkness I go cuckoo for coco puffs) y te expongo al instante al temblor de una estampida, (and I expose you at the instant of a sudden shiver) siento tu piel como eriza (I feel your goose bumps) y asi se destila en nosotros el futuro. (and so the future is distilled in us)
En la oscuridad me tomo el tiempo necesario, (In the darkness I take the time necessary) tiempo que no es in vano, el tiempo en que nos exploramos, (time not in vain, the time in which we explore us) llegamos a la cima y nos quedamos alla arriba, (We arrive at the peak and we stay up top there) lejos de la ciudad. (far from the city)
3 Answers
A couple to get you started ...
Maybe 'by your side' might be better for 'a tu costilla'
En la oscuridad se hinchan los labios de la dicha was missing the 'h' from hinchan and hincharse means to swell up.
Manos observan sin prisa could also be translated - hands take their time observing, or hands leisurely observing.
For the next part, I wonder if it's another typo: y todo el viento nos trespasa ...
Is there a verb trespasar? or should it be traspasar? to go through, the wind goes right through us, maybe?
Here's my two cents, although you did a great job:
En la oscuridad las sombras toman vida (In the darkness the shadows come to life) y la falta de colores crea imÁgenes escondidas, (and the lack of color creates hidden images) noche desabriga piel cautiva y yo a tu costilla, (Evening sheds “its” cautious skin and I "by your side",) hipnotizado al mando de tu olor. (hypnotized at the command of your smell)
En la oscuridad se Hinchan los labios de la dicha, (In the darkness... lips swell from happines) manos observan sin prisa, sonidos enfatizan (hands observe without hurry, sounds emphasize) y todo el viento nos trAspasa y pasa (and all the wind trespasses and passes us) y la sensacion no acaba... tarda. (and the sensation does not finish... “it takes a long time”)
En la oscuridad (In the darkness) abro surcos en mi pecho para que entre tu gracia. (I open grooves in my chest to “let in your grace”) En “mí” tu techo, tu casa. (In me your roof, your house) Rico ritual de intimidad en la oscuridad (Rich ritual of intimacy in the darkness) pongo todo en el ritmo (I put everything in the rhythm) y del resto se encarga el instinto. (and instinct will take charge of the rest)
En la oscuridad me pongo de cuclillas (In the darkness “I kneel down”) y te expongo al instante al temblor de una estampida, (and I instantly expose you to the shake of a stampede) siento tu piel como eriza (I feel your goose bumps) y asi se destila en nosotros el futuro. (and so the future is distilled in us)
En la oscuridad me tomo el tiempo necesario, (In the darkness I take the time necessary) tiempo que no es in vano, el tiempo en que nos exploramos, (time not in vain, the time in which we explore “each other”) llegamos a la cima y nos quedamos allÁ arriba, (We arrive at the peak and we stay “up there”) lejos de la ciudad. (far from the city)
