Please, correct this exercise (English)

Question

Carla looked at the car in surprise. She was very happy because this car was her gift for her brithday, so her father told her: " if you pass all the exams I will gift you a car for you next brithday". The car that her father had gifted her was more beatiful than Carla expected. It was sport car , big, elegant, red and convertible car. When her father gave her the key of the car, Carla went to show it to her better friend and her boyfriend too. Now that she go to the school in her car, she wakes up more late and can go to study at the library every day, as there is from her house to library ten kilometres more or less.

Hi Nakira. Welcome to the forum! - rac1, Sep 24, 2012

Answer 1

Carla looked at the car in surprise. She was very happy because this car was a gift for her brithday. Her father told her, "If you pass all the exams I will give you a car for your next birthday." The car that her father had given her was more beautiful than Carla had expected. It was a big, elegant, red, convertible sports car. When her father gave her the key to the car, Carla went to show it to her best friend and her boyfriend too. Now that she can go to school in her car she wakes up later. She can also study at the library every day, as the library is ten kilometres or less from her house.

This is how I would write it. It's very close to how Ian wrote it but with a few changes in punctuation. I also changed what I believe is a run-on sentence.

A ti también Andrew Muchas gracias por tu tiempo y ayuda!!!! :))) - nakira4, Sep 24, 2012

Answer 2

A good attempt amiga

Carla looked at the car in surprise. She was very happy because this car was her gift for her brithday. Her father had told her: " If you pass all the exams I will gift (give) you a car for your next birthday". The car that her father had gifted (given) her was more beatiful than Carla had expected. It was a big, elegant, red convertible sports car. When her father gave her the key of the car, Carla went to show it to her best friend and her boyfriend too. Now that she goes to the school in her car, she wakes up later and can go to study at the library every day, which is about ten kilometres from her house.

Note "to gift" is correct English but not used as much as "to give"

Ian typing error. "for your next birthday" - Eddy, Sep 24, 2012

opops - thanks Eddy - ian-hill, Sep 24, 2012

Muchas gracias Ian por tu ayuda !!!! :)) - nakira4, Sep 24, 2012