Does this sentence make sense grammatically?

Question

Does this make sense?

Mejor dicho, no estoy segura de que se pueda entender la pobreza sin verlo con tus propios ojos.

Gracias por la ayuda

Answer 1

Looks good to me apart from 'tus' - if you have the impersonal se puede I think you should use 'sus' - but i'm not a native speaker and still learning too. Other than that it looks pretty good

Oh and the 'mejor dicho' - best said? Is that what you wanted to say?

Answer 2

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Mejor dicho, no estoy segura de que se pueda entender la pobreza sin verlo con tus propios ojos.

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Mejor dicho - Better said, - or- rather,

I might have chosen, "con los propios ojos"...since "one can" with their own eyes.

(just an idea/opinion)

But, I'm in agreement with Eddy, Mariana, and Kiwi-Girl. All made keen observations.

I too, defer to a native...for a different perspective. So, good luck.

Answer 3

Looks okay to me . The "no estoy segura de que" would invoke the subjunctive, hence "se pueda". Obviously there are other ways of saying the same thing but the above appears acceptable. However, I am not a native so wait for more answers.

Espero haberte ayudado.

Answer 4

Mejor dicho, no estoy segura de que se pueda entender la pobreza sin verlo con tus propios ojos.

This looks good to me.