Help me with my Essay!!!

Question

Thank you guys for your help

Answer 1

Rabe

I have corrected your post so it can now be read. The problem was the indenting of each paragraph.

Eddy.

worth a vote for sure :) - Kiwi-Girl, Sep 2, 2012

Great job, Eddy! - francobollo, Sep 2, 2012

Thanks guys. - Eddy, Sep 3, 2012

Answer 2

Here's help with paragraph 4:

The first day of school was very embarrassing and shocking. The fact that I had to change classrooms for each period or had no idea how to get to the school cafeteria was difficult. The two stories that stuck with me the most were: first, when my first period English teacher told me several times to go to the next period when the first period bell rang. I thought she was saying something else, so I kept shaking my head and said: “no,” so my classmates started laughing out loud. To be honest, I felt so stupid in front of those students.

The other one was, when I was in the school bus with the elementary school kids! I was shocked and amazed and was wondering why I was the only 14-year old student among elementary school kids. That's when I knew that something was wrong.

Of course I was lost at the elementary school, so I remember having tears in my eyes and that I was about to cry. Thank God one lady saw that I was the only student walking outside when the other students were already in the classrooms, so she took me to the office and finally, they sent me back to my school. I think that was pretty embarrassing.

I also remember how I was using the faculty restroom at my More Land Middle School. After I used the bathroom, some teachers took me outside and told me not to use this bathroom again! I was pretty scared and ashamed.

Answer 3

I'll do the first para for you:

I remember when I first arrived in the United States, my family and I were sitting together and staring at everything that we could see in the airport. There were many people walking around with their suitcases, other people were speaking different languages and some people were eating giant food. I named them giant food because at that time, I didn't know what the food was really called. Everything looked great and fabulous to me. I love the U.S.A. and I was very excited knowing that I was finally in the United States. When I was in Thailand, I saw airplanes every now and then and I would always wave to the airplanes when they were flying in the sky. I couldn't have ever **imagined that I **would fly to America in a huge airplane. I felt as if everything was a fantasy but reality woke me up. At that moment, everything seemed just perfect and I felt like I was the luckiest person in the whole wide world!

Isn't it strange how we say "The USA" but drop the definite article before "America". - Eddy, Sep 3, 2012

yes I was thinking that myself when I typed it lol :) los genios pensamos igual jeje - Kiwi-Girl, Sep 3, 2012

Answer 4

This thread illustrates how SD is much more than just a dictionary and translator! Kudos to everyone!

Answer 5

Most important is to not forget our own language, which is Burmese. I know my English is not perfect, but being able to communicate with others in English was one of the greatest accomplishments for my life.

It is important to remember our native language, Burmese. I know my English is not perfect, but the ability to communicate with others in English is one of the greatest accomplishments in my life.

The corrections I made allow for a better flow. It sounds more natural to my ear. I used "is one of the greatest accomplishments in my life" because it still is.

Answer 6

Fortunately, soon we knew how to speak English pretty well and understood about the American culture; we also made friends and know about the technology. America is just perfect! As much as we hated it at first, now we are totally in love with America. I still want to go back to Thailand, but just for a visit; I don't want to live there for the rest of my life because I know there are more steps that I need to take in order to reach my goal. As neither my father nor my mother were not able to graduate from college, they had to work very laborious jobs. I know they would never want me to go through what they did. I'm very glad that my family still celebrates our own culture even though we are facing another totally different culture. Most important is to not forget our own language, which is Burmese. I know my English is not perfect, but being able to communicate with others in English was one of the greatest accomplishments for my life. I have to admit that the scary moments that we had before are just a joke for us now. Sometimes I laugh out loud when I think about those embarrassing moments.

I think a "now" would be beneficial here. "and now know about the technology". - Eddy, Sep 3, 2012

estoy de acuerdo - or 'and learnt about technology' :) - Kiwi-Girl, Sep 3, 2012

also, as neither my father or (nor) my mother were able to graduate ... they had to do jobs that were labour intensive. ... It is very important not to forget ... in English 'has been' one of ..... in my life. - Kiwi-Girl, Sep 3, 2012

If you are going to use neither, you must follow up with nor, and labor in American English. Labour is a British spelling, but I agree with the labor intensive change. - rheit, Sep 9, 2012

Answer 7

Hi Rabe,

Please re-post. Your words got truncated when you cut and pasted them onto here.

so I have to type everything again? - Rabe, Sep 1, 2012

Answer 8

Do you speak English as a native person?