Another proof reading on Weather. Pls check. Thanks.
I write in black letters some words that I am not sure if they are correct. May I leave the word “the” out? please check my proof reading also.
Seasons
Winter, spring, summer and autumn are the four seasons of our calendar. Each one includes three months of the year, and represents the change of the weather during a period of one year. The four seasons occurs over around the World, but are more or less extreme between them depend on the latitude of a country. The weather is bad and strong during winter, because temperatures are lower and usually snows. Furthermore the sun gives light during less hours per day. So winter is cold and dark, especially in northern countries. For example, in Sweden snows every day from December to February, and sometimes people could not go out of their home due to the among of snow in streets. The day has three-four hours of sunlight, and temperatures are lower than twenty degrees. For this reason Swedish people has nice, comfortable and cosy houses. They have to stay long time at home. (at home long time). The weather improves during the spring, the temperature increases and there are more sunny days than in winter. However many days rain and this water allows trees and plants to grow up (allow to grow up trees and plants). This is very nice in northern countries where trees sleep during winter and flower in March. Cities are full of flowers and April is like an explosion of colour. In summer the temperature rises up and hot days are common. From June to August the sun shines about fifteen hours per day and rains few days. In summer people use to go to the beach to refresh and to have a sunbath. This is typical in Mediterranean countries, where the temperature of the seawater increases enough to have a comfortable bath. During summer, trees are full of fruits and we use them to make juices or ice creams. Finally, autumn arrives and the weather worsens again. September is windy, October is wet and November is cloudy and fresh. Trees lost their leaves and streets seem a brown blanket.
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I made changes in bold. Things in italics are explained below your paragraph.
Winter, spring, summer and autumn are the four seasons of our calendar. Each one includes three months of the year, and represents the change of the weather during a period of one year. The four seasons occur [subject is plural] all over/around [all over the world OR all around the world] the world [doesn't need capitalization], but the changes are more or less extreme depending on the latitude of the country. The weather is bad and strong during winter, because temperatures are lower and it usually snows. Furthermore there are fewer hours of sunlight per day. So winter is cold and dark, especially in northern countries. For example, in Sweden it snows every day from December to February, and sometimes people cannot [present tense] leave their home due to the amount of snow in the streets. The day has 3-4 [usually we put the digit instead of writing out a number if it is less than 10] hours of sunlight, and temperatures are lower than twenty degrees. For this reason Swedish people have [plural] nice, comfortable and cosy houses. They have to stay at home a long time. The weather improves during the spring; the temperature increases and there are more sunny days than in the winter. However it rains for many days and this water allows trees and plants to grow [you use "grow up" for people, not plants]. This is very nice in northern countries where trees are dormant [a tree can´t sleep. They can be dormant, which means they don´t grow or develop] during the winter and bloom in March. Cities are full of flowers and April is like an explosion of colour. In the summer the temperature rises and hot days are common. From June to August the sun shines about fifteen hours per day and it rains fewer[few refers to an exact amount of days. fewer refers to "less" or an unknown amount] days. In summer people usually go to the beach to refresh and to sunbathe. This is typical in Mediterranean countries, where the temperature of the seawater increases enough to comfortably bathe. During the summer, trees are full of fruit and we use them to make juice or ice cream. Finally, autumn arrives and the weather worsens again. September is windy, October is wet and November is cloudy and fresh. Trees lose [present tense] their leaves and streets seem to be covered by a brown blanket.
"the weather is bad and strong during winter" This sounds strange. I am not sure how to reword it to make it make more sense. Perhaps "The weather is poor during winter." I am not sure.
"go to the beach to refresh" I don´t know what you mean here, but refresh is the incorrect word choice. It sounds odd when it is used this way. I would recommend removing it completely or replacing it with something else.
Good essay! These are my corrections (in bold) and comments in italics. ¡Buena composición! Estos son mis correcciones (en negrita) y comentarios en cursiva.
Winter, spring, summer and autumn are the four seasons of our calendar. Each one includes three months of the year, and represents the change of the weather during a period of one year. The four seasons occur (forma verbal plural es necesario en este caso) around (también se puede decir "all around" o "all over") the world (no se necesita una mayúscula), but are more or less extreme depending (en este caso se usa el participio presente) on the latitude of the ("a" suena un poco incómodo en este caso) country. The weather is bad (en inglés, no usamos la palabra "strong" para el tiempo) during winter, because temperatures are lower and it (en inglés, para describir el tiempo, usamos "it" como subject verbal) usually snows. Furthermore, (simplemente añadiría una coma) the sun shines (mejor palabra) during fewer (cuando se habla de sustantivos contables en inglés, se usa "fewer" para significar "menos") hours per day. So winter is cold and dark, especially in northern countries. For example, in Sweden it (a ver encima) snows every day from December to February, and sometimes people can (acabas de usar el presente en este frase, y los verbos tienen sue acordarse tanto en inglés como en español) not go out of their homes (plural) due to the amount ("Among" quiere decir "entre." "Amount" significa "cantidad") of snow in the streets. The day has three to four hours (usualmente sólo se usa una raya entre números como "3-4". En este caso diría "to", lo cual es lo sue representa "-") of sunlight, and temperatures are lower than twenty degrees. For this reason Swedish people have ("have" es plural, mientras "has" es singular, y no se acuerda con "people"-- "personas") nice, comfortable and cosy houses. They have to stay at home a lot ("a lot" quiere decir "mucho" y suena mejor en esta frase). The weather improves during the spring. The temperature increases and there are more sunny days than in winter. However, many days it rains (en inglés es "it" quien llove y nieva, no el día) and this water allows trees and plants to grow (no se dice "to grow up" en inglés para árboles, solamente personas). This is very nice in northern countries where trees are dormant ("dormant" es la palabra cientifica; esta frase quiere decir "son durmientes") during winter and flower in March. Cities are full of flowers and April is like an explosion of colour (interesante que elijieras la ortografía de Inglaterra--"colour" en lugar de "color". Esta frase es buy buena. 
). In summer the temperature rises ("up" no es necesario) and hot days are common. From June to August the sun shines about fifteen hours per day and it does not rain often (suena mejor así) . In summer people often (a menudo) go to the beach to relax (relajarse) and to sunbathe. ("to sunbathe" quiere decir "tomar el sol" en inglés) This is typical in Mediterranean countries, where the temperature of the seawater increases enough to have a comfortable bath. During summer, trees are full of fruits and we use them to make juice or ice cream. (el singular suena mejor, y "ice cream" es casi nunca plural) Finally, autumn arrives and the weather worsens again. September is windy, October is wet and November is cloudy and cool. ("cool" es este caso significa "fresco". "Fresh" se usa para cosas como vegetales que están listos para comer o cosas nuevas) Trees lose (el tiempo verbal presente) their leaves and streets seem a brown blanket.
Wow! Great job! I hope these corrections help you!
Here is the fully corrected essay without bold and comments:
Winter, spring, summer and autumn are the four seasons of our calendar. Each one includes three months of the year, and represents the change of the weather during a period of one year. The four seasons occur over around the world, but are more or less extreme depending on the latitude of the country. The weather is bad during winter because temperatures are lower and it usually snows. Furthermore, the sun shines during fewer hours per day. So winter is cold and dark, especially in northern countries. For example, in Sweden it snows every day from December to February, and sometimes people can not go out of their homes due to the amount of snow in the streets. The day has three to four hours of sunlight, and temperatures are lower than twenty degrees. For this reason Swedish people have nice, comfortable and cosy houses. They have to stay at home a lot. The weather improves during the spring. The temperature increases and there are more sunny days than in winter. However, many days it rains and this water allows trees and plants to grow. This is very nice in northern countries where trees are dormant during winter and flower in March. Cities are full of flowers and April is like an explosion of colour. In summer the temperature rises and hot days are common. From June to August the sun shines about fifteen hours per day and it does not rain often. In summer people often go to the beach to relax and to sunbathe. This is typical in Mediterranean countries, where the temperature of the seawater increases enough to have a comfortable bath. During summer, trees are full of fruits and we use them to make juice or ice cream. Finally, autumn arrives and the weather worsens again. September is windy, October is wet and November is cloudy and cool. Trees lose their leaves and streets seem a brown blanket.
