Could someone help me with this short translation?

Question

I'd like to send an email to a small B&B that we will be staying in, in Mexico, and ask the owner if they have a crib or portable crib that we could use/borrow during our stay there.

To be translated: "I wanted to ask whether you have a crib or portable crib that we could borrow or rent for our daughter during our stay there."

My current Spanish translation: Quisiera preguntar si tiene una cuna o una cuna portatíl que podriamos prestar o alquilar para nuestra hija de dos años.

I am worried that this sounds horribly awkward. Any help would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!

Answer 1

More natural is: Quisiera saber si hay cuna o cuna portátil para prestar o alquilar. Nuestra hija tiene dos años.

Gracias, gracias Esteban3304 and whiterockjesse! Eso suena much mejor. Lo agradezco. - ldoraz, May 15, 2012

Answer 2

Quisiera preguntar si tiene una cuna o una cuna portatíl que podriamos prestar o alquilar para nuestra hija de dos años.

Quisiera preguntarle si tiene una cuna o una cuna portátil que nos podría prestar o alquilar para nuestra hija de dos años.

Why did you change "podríamos" to "nos podría"? - Esteban3304, May 13, 2012

Because the verb 'prestar' means 'provide or lend out'. - sinsonte, May 14, 2012

Answer 3

Esteban , I agree with you . But would also add " durante nuestra visita "

I agree. I would change the first sentence to: "Quisiera saber si hay cuna o cuna portátil para prestar o alquilar durante nuestra visita." - Esteban3304, May 14, 2012

Answer 4

Pedir prestado/a

Answer 5

Why did you change "podríamos" to "nos podría"?

Because they want to borrow a crib, not lend it.

Answer 6

agreed with chivi