This is my second poem that I have written

Question

Aquí es mi segunda poema. Así, disfrutar y por favor corrija!

Soy lo que hace duda de usted. Soy lo que hace de usted desmoronarse. Soy tu asesina, soy tu la amante. Voy destruir usted, voy caricia usted. Soy tu conciencia.

I am what makes you hesitate. I am what makes you crumble. I am your killer, I am your lover. I will destroy you, I will caress you. I am your conscience.

Gracias a todos!

Wow Kat! Sooner or later you will be the resident poet of Spanishdict. :D - cheskasullivan, Mar 14, 2012

I think you meant "I am your consciousness". :) - cheskasullivan, Mar 14, 2012

Oooh... yes that's what I mean! Thanks, Cheska! :) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

Weldone, Katy! Wish you inspiration!:) - Silvia_Tcherneva, Mar 14, 2012

Thanks Silvia!! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

Wow, this is great stuff, Kat! - sanlee, Mar 14, 2012

Thank you, Sandy! :) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

Once again, great content. - DJ_Huero, Mar 14, 2012

Gracias, amigo. :) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

Wow! You make very nice poems! Keep it up! - t1funnyface, Mar 14, 2012

Thanks! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

beautiful - katy23, Mar 15, 2012

Thanks, Twin! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 15, 2012

Answer 1

Aquí está mi segundo poema. Así que disfrutad y, por favor, correjidlo:

"Soy lo que te hace dudar. Soy lo que hace que te desmorones ( = lo que te hace desmoronarte). Soy tu asesina, soy tu amante. Te destruiré, te acariciaré/te cuidaré. Soy tu conciencia".

Well done, Kat!! It was really difficult!

Thank you, Cordobesa! :) :) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

Answer 2

Nice poem and nice work on the Spanish! I look forward to seeing more.

Thank you, Mariana! :) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

Answer 3

Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012