My first poem that I made

Question

I am a little nervous about doing this, but hear goes... my first poem that I wrote.

Puedo ser tú mal enemiga y puedo ser tú bien amiga. Puedo ser tú partidaria y tú critica. Tú puede me odian y amor me, pero tú puede nunca salir me. Estoy tú.

I can be your worst enemy and I can be your best friend. I can be your greatest supporter and your worst critic. You can hate me and love me, but you can never leave me. I am you.

Gracias a todos. Please don't laugh! Also, I hope you guys dont mind my numerous poems and things....

Absolutely beautiful!! - kdrinning, Mar 13, 2012

Very clever... good stuf! =] - DJ_Huero, Mar 13, 2012

Great poem! =D - NikkiLR, Mar 13, 2012

Nice poem! I love the ending "I am you". As I was reading it I wondering who was talking, but then it hit me when I read the last sentence! It's great! - t1funnyface, Mar 13, 2012

Thank you! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

great, I am proud of you twin :) - katy23, Mar 13, 2012

Haha, thanks "twin"! :) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

You are very courageous, so let those nerves loosen as you see our comments. - bandit51jd, Mar 13, 2012

Thank you, Bandit. That's very kind. - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

Answer 1

Of course, we don't laugh, Kat!! You did a great job

Mi sugerencia:

Puedo ser tu peor enemiga y (puedo ser) tu mejor amiga.

Puedo ser tu mayor partidaria y tu peor crítica.

Puedes odiarme y amarme,

pero nunca (podrás) dejarme. Soy tú.

Thank you, Cordobesa! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

De nada, amiga. Espero seguir viendo tus traducciones ;) - Cordobesa, Mar 13, 2012

:) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

Otra vez, bien dicho Cordobesa. =] - DJ_Huero, Mar 13, 2012

Answer 2

I am not laughing KatRJ far from it you are doing a great job . I have found

learning Spanish one of the most difficult things that I have ever done ,

and trying to translate into another language ones thoughts and feelings

as one does in poetry ,and especially free verse is just so daunting that

I am as near to giving up as I was 1 year ago. So I hope you continue for

I think that you have a better understanding of the language than I have.

I

Bien hecho y buena suerte.

Gracias, señor! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

BTW, I doubt if I understand it better then you! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 14, 2012

Answer 3

I can be your worst enemy and I can be your best friend.

I can be your greatest supporter and your worst critic.

You can hate me and love me, but you can never leave me.

I am you.

Beautiful!

Thank you, Mariana! :) - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

Answer 4

Puedo ser tu [tú means you, tu means your] peor [peor means worst, mal means bad] enemiga y puedo ser tu mejora [mejor means best, bien means good] amiga.

Puedo ser tu mayor [greatest] partidaria y tu peor [worst] crítica [don´t forget the accent].

Tú puedes [2nd person plural conjugation] odiarme y amarme [a conjugated verb is usually followed by infinitive verbs. Here, I tacked the direct object, "me" at the end of each one.], pero tú no [Spanish is famous for double and sometimes triple negatives to get their point across] puedes dejarme [dejar means to leave behind, whereas salir is to exit/leave] nunca.

Soy tú.

Thank you! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012

Answer 5

Welldone, Katy! Just keep doing it!

Thank you, Silvia! - 00cdfbd9, Mar 13, 2012