Very basic sentences!

Question

Soooooo, I've written a very short little passage with SUPER simple sentences. I've only been learning for about a week so bear with me, haha. I know it won't sound like how a person would normally introduce themself, but the point is just to see if I can use some of what I've learned to form basic sentences. So, how did I do?

¡Hola! Me llamo Allyssa. Mucho gusto! (: Soy inteligente, hablador, y morena. No soy atlético. Como pizza y manzanas. No como arroz. Bebo jugo y no bebo té.

Wonderful. And only after one week. Keep it up! - katydew, Mar 4, 2012

yea this is great for only one week in. - tsgrantham, Mar 4, 2012

Not bad for a beginner no wait I think you're almost at the top. - nakimera, Mar 4, 2012

Nothing wrong here. Muy bueno! I am a beginner too. Scary isnt it. Hola, back at you. Me llamo Joann. Mucho gusto. Soy un estudiante, y voy la escuela cada dia. No soy atletico. No me importa. Tengas un buen dia. - oldpink, Mar 4, 2012

Haha, thanks to all you guys! I appreciate the encouragement! I can't wait to learn more :D Complex sentences, here we come! Hahaha - allyssa16, Mar 4, 2012

Answer 1

You did it ok. You can try this:

¡Hola! Me llamo Allyssa. Mucho gusto! (: Soy inteligente, habladorA, y morena. No soy atléticA. Como pizza y manzanas. No como arroz. Bebo jugo y no bebo té.

Sólo es cuestión de género, pero muy bien!!!

Thanks! Just what kind of answer I was looking for! I'll be sure to pay more attention to the gender of those adjectives (: Thanks again!!! - allyssa16, Mar 4, 2012

Answer 2

Ok muchacha lets get down to business. Try a more flashy approach. Like this: ¡Hola! Mi nombre es Allysa. ¡Qué agradable a conocerte! Yo me describiría como conversador inteligente, y marrón. No soy tan atlético. Me gusta la pizza y las manzanas, pero no me gusta el arroz. Puedo beber el jugo, pero yo no bebo té.

                       Which is translated as:

Hello! My name is Allyssa. How very nice to meet you! I describe myself as smart, talkative, and brown. I'm not that athletic. I like pizza and apples, but I do not like rice. I drink juice , but I do not drink tea. Good luck. Hope this helped.

Good job for a first try its almost fluent. - nakimera, Mar 4, 2012

Thank you! That definitely adds a little flashy-ness to it and makes it sound more fluent. (: Awesome advice! - allyssa16, Mar 4, 2012

Good job - dpkpandit, Mar 4, 2012