Can you check my sentences please?

Question

1. Mi hermana tiene risas bonitas. – My sister has pretty laughs.
2. No lo me gusta cuando una persona derriba los libros de un estudiante. – I don’t like it when a person knocks down the books of a student.
3. Personas viejas tienen problemas del cuerpo cuando ellos hincan. – Old people have bodily problems when they kneel.
4. Mi primo atrevido le gusta muchas aventuras. – My daring cousin likes many adventures.
5. Cuando yo era niña, yo ensillaba para montar un caballo. – When I was a kid, I saddled up to ride a horse.
6. Una manada de animales grandes es muy peligroso. – A herd of animals is very dangerous.
7. Durante de esclavitud, trabajadores recibía azotes para pereza. – uring slavery, workers would recieve whips for laziness.
8. Cuando los niños vieron camión del helado, ellos arremetieron con dinero. – When the kids saw the ice cream truck, they charged with money.
9. Yo me quejo cuando necesito ir al dentista. – I complain when I have to go to the dentist.
10. Para el Nuevo Año, yo prometo leer la Biblia cada dia.
11. Los animales son desnudos; ellos no llevan ropa. – Animals are naked; they don’t wear clothes.
12. Yo siempre voy a Mamá para concejos. I always go to Mom for advice.
13. Los estudiantes de mi escuela necesitan despertarse al alba. – The students of my school need wake up at dawn.
14. Yo agradezco para mi familia. – I am grateful for my family.
15. Hay una capilla cerca de mi casa. – There is a chapel near my house.
16. Es cómico cuando una persona desata sus zapatas y se cae. – It is funny when someone unties their shoes and falls.
17. Me gusta hacer proezas para otras. – I like to do deeds for others.
18. Hoy mucha desgracia en el mundo. – There is much disgrace/misery in the world today.
19. No me gusta cuando personas juran. – I don’t like it when people swear.
20. Yo deseo alguien dibuje un retrato de mi. - I wish someone would draw a portrait of me.

Are you learning English or are you learning Spansh? - rabbitwho, Jan 12, 2012

Please, I thought of these sentences in Spanish first I only translated it in English quickly for clarification. My prize winning English essays & poems say enough. Just correct the Spanish instead of complaining. - pianoviolin4life, Jan 12, 2012

Wow! ! ! What a rude response. - faliron, Jan 12, 2012

Answer 1

My prize winning English essays & poems say enough. Just correct the Spanish instead of complaining. -

I am sorry, but unless you change your attitude, your texts or sentences will not be allowed on this site, thanks.

I do wonder though who gave out those awards...tsetsetse

Answer 2

Lets all take one.

Mi hermana tiene risas bonitas. – My sister has pretty laughs.

Mi hermana tiene una risa bonita. - My sister has a pretty laugh.

excelente:) - 00494d19, Jan 13, 2012

Answer 3

Here are some comments about the English...

My sister has pretty laughs.

You wouldn't say this. You could say, My sister laughs in a pretty way.

Old people have bodily problems when they kneel.

You might say, Older people have physical problems when they kneel.

During slavery, workers would recieve whips for laziness.

During slavery, workers would be whipped for being lazy.

When the kids saw the ice cream truck, they charged with money.

When the kids saw the ice cream truck, they charged the truck with money in their hands.

Animals are naked; they don’t wear clothes.

We don't really say animals are naked, because it means one is not wearing clothes, when animals are not expected to wear clothes to begin with.

The students of my school need wake up at dawn.

The students in my school must wake up at dawn.

It is funny when someone unties their shoes and falls.

It is funny when someone ties someone's shoes together and they fall (if this is funny!)

Thank for the help, but I passed AP Language & AP Lit w/ A+s so I don't need English help. I thought of the sentences in my head in Spa. first & I also had to use required words to form these sentences for my assignment. That's why the language seems awk. - pianoviolin4life, Jan 12, 2012

From your attitude, I wonder if anyone would care to help you. - faliron, Jan 12, 2012

Answer 4

Here are some corrections regarding the use of gustar.

No lo me gusta cuando una persona...

No me gusta cuando una persona...

Mi primo atrevido le gusta muchas aventuras.

Le gustan a mi primo atrevido las aventuras.