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Question

Describe you the event for which you feel most proud of and why?

An event that I am most proud is when I first received an honor roll because it symbolized my hard work.

Un evento que estoy muy orgulloso de es cuando yo tengo mi primer honor roll porque simboliza mi duro labor.

Please make any revisions in my sentence thank you

Welcome to the forum , please accept your first vote :) - Kiwi-Girl, Jan 9, 2012

Answer 1

Describe the event (eliminate the first you) and... I first made the honor roll... [An honor roll is a recorded position where you are honored for your achievement]. If you meant to say you recieved an honor to symbolize your hard work that is OK also.

Now, if the purpose of this thread is to have people continue with their proud moments then I am going to have to say you need a moderator

Good point about 'making' the honr roll Yesero - I don't think it's meant to be a continuing thread because the heading just requests a revision of the given text :) - Kiwi-Girl, Jan 9, 2012

Possibly but it is asking an ongoing type of question which is why I mentioned it. There is another one also. - Yeser007, Jan 9, 2012

ah I see :) - Kiwi-Girl, Jan 9, 2012

Answer 2

Hi there, I'm still learning too but these would be by suggestions:

An event that I am most proud 'of' was

Un evento 'de' que más estoy orgulloso era cuando estuvo por primera vez en el cuadro de honor porque simbolizó mi trabajo duro.

Felicitaciones!