Please, could you proofread my English Essay?
In Peru, unique school uniform lead color, it was decreed by the government of Juan Velasco Alvarado in the year 1971. Students of different grades and schools in the country should wear exactly the same. They claimed there would not differences cultural, economic and social. In 90's this rule changes because the private schools had their own uniforms and colors. It shows that the use of school uniform is vital because it promotes the students' order and discipline. I think students should wear uniforms because they are in process of formation and use them to learn to respect the rules. But opponents affirm that the use of uniform hinder their individuality.
Opponents claim wearing uniform suppresses children’s individuality, they inhibit their creativity and expression free, but It is unfounded, because children can be creative in other times and other places, however, I believe to wear uniform helps to better socializing, otherwise, there are children who would mock of their classmate, who do not wear brand’s clothes.
Opponents claim that school has the challenge of promoting respect for the person and learn to accept their differences but they do not know is that if they wear casual clothes, students with better economical situation, will dress better and this situation would produce low self-esteem in others and would be affected their academic level.
In conclusion, wearing uniforms promotes a better organization in schools and helps students to identify with their school.
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In Peru, unique school uniform lead color, (I haven’t changed this sentence because I wasn’t sure what you meant, do you have the original Spanish?) It was decreed by the government of Juan Velasco Alvarado in 1971 that students of different grades and schools in the country should wear exactly the same. They claimed there would be no cultural, economic or social differences. In the 90's this rule changed because private schools had their own uniforms and colors. It shows that the use of school uniform is vital because it promotes order and discipline. I think students should wear uniforms because they are in process of formation and uniforms help them to learn to respect the rules. But opponents believe that uniform hinders individuality.
Opponents claim wearing uniform suppresses children’s individuality, inhibits their creativity and free expression, but this is unfounded. Children can be creative at other times and in other places. However, I believe wearing uniform helps better socialization, otherwise some children would mock their classmate who do not wear brand names.
Opponents claim that schools have the challenge of promoting respect for the person and acceptance of individual differences but what they do not realise is that, if they wear casual clothes, students who are better off economically will dress better. This could produce low self-esteem in others and affect their academic level.
In conclusion, wearing uniform promotes better organization in schools and helps students to identify with their school.
In Peru, where schools are uniformly painted a standar lead color, it was decreed by the government of Juan Velasco Alvarado in the year 1971 that students of different grades and schools in the country should dress exactly the same.
It claimed this would help minimize any differences - cultural, economic or social. In 90's this rule changed because the private schools had their own uniforms and colors. It is shown that the use of school uniform is vital because it promotes the students' order and discipline. I think that students should wear uniforms because they are in the process of formation and this will teach them to respect rules. Opponents, however, assert that the use of uniforms hinder individuality.
Opponents also claim that wearing a uniform suppresses children’s individuality (you have just said this in the previous sentence??) , it inhibits their creativity and free expression This view, however, is unfounded, because children can be creative at other times and places, however, I believe that wearing a uniform helps students to socializing better. Without the standard uniform there are children who would mock any classmates, who did not wear brand clothes.
Opponents make the statement (just to avoid starting two paragraphs in a row with opponents claim) that the school has the challenge of promoting respect for others and to learn to accept their differences but what they do not know is that if they wear casual clothes, students with a better economical situation will dress better and this situation would produce low self-esteem in others and their academic level could be affected .
In conclusion, wearing a uniform promotes better organization in schools and helps students to identify with their school.
Well done, that was a very good attempt. Some of the sentences are longer than usual in English but I've left them as is so as not to make too many changes - sigue así, bien hecho!
In Peru, unique school uniform lead color, it was decreed by the government of Juan Velasco Alvarado in the year 1971. Students of different grades and schools in the country should wear exactly the same uniform. They claimed there would not differences cultural, economic and social. In the 90's, this rule changed because the private schools had their own uniforms and colors. It shows that the use of school uniform is vital because it promotes the students' order and discipline. I think students should wear uniforms because they are in process of formation and use them to learn to respect the rules. But opponents affirm that the use of uniform hinder their individuality.
Opponents claim wearing uniform suppresses children’s individuality, they inhibit their creativity and free expression, but it is unfounded, because children can be creative in other times and other places. However, I believe to wear uniform helps to better socializing, otherwise, the children who do not wear brand-name clothing, could be mock by their classmate.
Opponents claim that school has the challenge of promoting respect for the person and learn to accept their differences, but they do not know that if they wear casual clothes, students with better economical situation, will dress better and this situation would produce low self-esteem in others and could affect their academic level.
In conclusion, wearing uniforms promotes a better organization in schools and helps students to identify with their school.
Great job! I'm not sure what you are trying to say in the first sentence but other than that it's great! I fixed a few things though! Maybe you were trying to say: In Peru, school uniforms were unique in color, but was changed by the government, and President Juan Velasco Alvarado, in the year of 1971.
