Please, Could you proofread my English text?

Question

This is the 3rd part of my Essay.

Opponents also maintain that there is the issue of cost. Many parents shop for their children's clothes at used and discount stores. Uniforms can cost more money than these families might be able to afford. Also, these students would need to buy additional clothing to wear after school and on the weekends. That's double the amount of money a family would spend than they would without the uniforms. However, the fact is that to use school uniforms is cheaper because the spend is once a year, and the school image looks betterl; on the other hand, if students use the home chothes parents have to buy clothes several times a year.

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Una observación, Maylegoas: Yo diría: proofread my English text (for mistakes). No tiene mucho sentido revisar los errores (proofread my mistakes); ¡ya sabemos que esos están equivocados! :-) - Gekkosan, Dec 20, 2011

thanks Gekkosan - maylegoas, Dec 20, 2011

Answer 1

I would say...

That's double the amount of money a family would spend than they would if uniforms were not required.

or

That's double the amount of money a family would normally spend.

For the last sentence, try using "cost is once a year," instead of "spend is once a year,". The word "spend" may be used as a noun (which is a person, place, or thing), but in everyday English it is normally used as a verb. You could also use the word "expense".

"betterl" should be "better"

I would also suggest the last phrase be changed. "on the other hand, if students do not wear uniforms, parents have to buy clothes several times a year." or "on the other hand, if students wear everyday clothes then parents have to purchase them several times a year."

You did a good job.

thanks Galene58 - maylegoas, Dec 20, 2011

Answer 2

Your essay is very good but the last portion needs just a little clarification.

However, the fact is that to use school uniforms is cheaper because the spend is once a year, and the school image looks betterl; on the other hand, if students use the home chothes parents have to buy clothes several times a year.

I would revise the last part of your essay to, perhaps, say "However, the fact is that to use school uniforms is cheaper because the money is spent once a year, and the school image looks better;"

thanks Jadey7 - maylegoas, Dec 20, 2011