Request for proofreading 5 request/recommendation sentences
The writing assignment was to write in Spanish 5 hypothetical proposals/requests to the mayor of my town. Could someone skilled in Spanish please proofread and give feedback? I wrote in bold the parts that I'm mostly insecure about. I also added the English translations for convenience. Thanks.
1) Firstly, I suggest to collect waste separately, hang surveillance cameras and punish whoever puts their garbage in the wrong bin.
En primer lugar, le sugiero que collecte la basura de modo separado, tienda cámaras patrullas y castigue a todos que ponen sus basura en el cubo equivocado.
2) I recommend you to repair the street markings at the crossings around my house. At this moment it's very dangerous and last week I almost had a crash with a driver who didn't know that he had to wait.
Le recomiendo que repare la señalización en los cruces en torno the mi casa. En eso está muy peligroso y en la semana pasada casi choqué con un chofér que no sabía que tuvo que esparar.
3) I ask you to not broaden the highway because there will be a lot of noise and less nature if you do this.
Le pregunto que no ensanche la carretera porque habrá mucho ruido y menos naturaleza si hace esto.
4) I suggest you to maintain the current noise rules for airplanes. If you weaken them then the nights will become very uncomfortable for the inhabitants.
Le sugiero que mantenga las reglas de ruido para las aviones actuales. Si las debila las noches se harán muy desagradable para los habitantes.
5) I request you to send surveillance vehicles to this neighborhood every thursday, friday and saturday night to check for antisocial parties.
Le pregunto que envie coches patrullas a este barrio cada jueves, viernes y sábado a medionoche para comprobar si no hay fiestas antisociales.
3 Answers
Let's begin (I wrote in bold the parts corrected):
1) Firstly, I suggest to collect waste separately, hang surveillance cameras and punish whoever puts their garbage in the wrong bin.
En primer lugar, le sugiero que recolecte la basura de modo separado, ponga cámaras patrullas y castigue a todos los/aquellos que pongan su basura en el cubo equivocado.
(castigue a todos que ponen ---> It is correct, but the pronoun is needed: "los" or "aquellos")
2) I recommend you to repair the street markings at the crossings around my house. At this moment it's very dangerous and last week I almost had a crash with a driver who didn't know that he had to wait.
Le recomiendo que repare la señalización en los cruces alrededor de mi casa. En este momento hay mucho peligro y la semana pasada casi choqué con un chofer que no sabía que tenía que esperar.
(en torno the mi casa ---> It is much better to use "alrededor de")
3) I ask you to not broaden the highway because there will be a lot of noise and less nature if you do this.
Le pido que no ensanche la carretera porque habrá mucho ruido y menos naturaleza si hace esto.
(Le pregunto ---> in spanish "preguntar" indicate "Question", and "pedir" indicate "Requesting", then the sentence is "Le pido")
4) I suggest you to maintain the current noise rules for airplanes. If you weaken them then the nights will become very uncomfortable for the inhabitants.
Le sugiero que mantenga las actuales reglas de ruido para los aviones. Si las debilita, las noches serán muy desagradables para los habitantes.
(mantenga las reglas de ruido ---> It is much better to use "mantenga los niveles de ruido", because it is about the quantity of noise that produce airplanes, but the literal translation is "mantenga las reglas de ruido")
5) I request you to send surveillance vehicles to this neighborhood every thursday, friday and saturday night to check for antisocial parties.
Le pido que envie vehículos de vigilancia a este barrio cada jueves, viernes y sábado a medionoche para comprobar si no hay fiestas antisociales.
(coches patrullas ---> It's wrong, this translates that way: "vehículos de vigilancia", because "surveillance" is the adjective of the word vehicle, and in spanish in this case the word "de" indicate attribute, then the sentence is "vehículos de vigilancia")
1) Firstly, I suggest to collect waste separately, hang surveillance cameras and punish whoever puts their garbage in the wrong bin.
En primer lugar, le sugiero que recoja la basura por separado, coloque cámaras y castigue a todos los que pongan su
basura en el cubo equivocado.
2) I recommend you to repair the street markings at the crossings around my house. At this moment it's very dangerous and last week I almost had a crash with a driver who didn't know that he had to wait.
Le recomiendo que repare la señalización en los cruces en torno a mi casa. Son muy peligrosos y la semana pasada casi choqué con un chofér que no sabía que tenía que cederme el paso
3) I ask you to not broaden the highway because there will be a lot of noise and less nature if you do this. Le pido que no ensanche la carretera porque habrá mucho ruido y menos naturaleza si hace esto. (Le pregunto ---> in spanish "preguntar" indicate "Question", and "pedir" indicate "Requesting", then the sentence is "Le pido") 4) I suggest you to maintain the current noise rules for airplanes. If you weaken them then the nights will become very uncomfortable for the inhabitants. Le sugiero que mantenga las actuales reglas de ruido para los aviones. Si las debilita, las noches serán muy desagradables para los habitantes. (mantenga las reglas de ruido ---> It is much better to use "mantenga los niveles de ruido", because it is about the quantity of noise that produce airplanes, but the literal translation is "mantenga las reglas de ruido") 5) I request you to send surveillance vehicles to this neighborhood every thursday, friday and saturday night to check for antisocial parties. Le pido que envie vehículos de vigilancia a este barrio cada jueves, viernes y sábado a medionoche para comprobar si no hay fiestas antisociales. (coches patrullas ---> It's wrong, this translates that way: "vehículos de vigilancia", because "surveillance" is the adjective of the word vehicle, and in spanish in this case the word "de" indicate attribute, then the sentence is "vehículos de vigilancia")
