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When I saw it, I shouted “Oh my God!” This history happened many years ago. When I was young, I think that I was about eight years old, I used to go for a walk with my cousins around the wood (forest) of my village. On Sundays, we met up and we went to wood with our grandfather. One day, while we were walking, suddenly we listened a shot and we stopped. At that moment, we looked each other. Then, my grandfather ordered us/asked us not to move and he started to walk slowly. He looked around and try to find the place from where the shot had come. We didn’t pay attention to the instructions that our grandfather had given us, and we ran to follow him. We found the place from where came the noise came. There was a hunter, he had hunted two rabbits. When I saw it, I shouted: “Oh my God!”…I was scared; I had never seen anything similar… I love the animals, I had a rabbit in my house, he was my friend… I didn’t understand anything that I saw. My grandfather told us that it was frequently and there were a lot of hunters in that area. They felt the hunting as a sport.
Now, when I remember that day, I feel happy because my grandfather taught us a lot of things.

Your profile lists English as "fluent" - are you asking for corrections in this English paragraph? - pesta, Dec 12, 2011

well, this is my mom´s account. But she is not here so I need help. - engspanish, Dec 12, 2011

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When I saw it, I shouted, “Oh my God!” This history happened many years ago. When I was young, (I think that I was about eight years old),, I used to go for a walking with my cousins around the woods (forests) of my village. On Sundays, we would meet up and wewent would go to the woods with our grandfather. One day, while we were walking, suddenly, we listened heard a shot and we stopped. At that moment, we looked at each other. Then, my grandfather ordered us /asked us not to move and he started to walk slowly. He looked around and tried to find the place from where the shot had come. We didn’t pay attention to the instructions that our grandfather had given us, and we ran to follow him. We found the place from where came the noise came. There was a hunter, he had hunted two rabbits. When I saw it, I shouted:, “Oh my God!”…I was scared; I had never seen anything similar… I love the animals. I had a rabbit in my house and he was my friend… I didn’t understand anything that I saw. My grandfather told us that it was this happened frequently and that there were a lot of hunters in that area. They felt **enjoyed the hunting as a sport. Now, when I remember that day, I feel happy because my grandfather taught us a lot of things.

Great job!

thanks alot. i need to learn more. - engspanish, Dec 12, 2011