Watching TV is bad for children

Question

Please, could your proofread my English mistakes? This is an introductory paragraph with a Thesis statement:

TV programs entertained to their public for hours, especially children that if they are not controlled by their parents are capable to be several hours playing in the wifi games or watching interesting TV programs lasting more than two hours; however, those gadgests like others that are of the current advances of our time can give to our children good programs and of interest to them, but also there are bad and senseless programs.

Thanks

Answer 1

TV programs entertain the public for hours, especially children who if not controlled by their parents are capable of spending several hours playing wifi games or watching TV programs for over two hours. These gadgets as well as more advanced ones of our time contain educational and interesting programs for our children but also contain bad and pointless programs.

perdon que te lo cambie pero hay veces que las palabras durante una conversacion no se traducen bien a ingles...

inglés, conversación (tildes) - pesta, Dec 12, 2011

thanks sandrazavala - maylegoas, Dec 12, 2011

Answer 2

TV programs (entertained) are entertaining to their public for hours, especially children** ,so** that if the television is not controlled by their parents children are capable (to) of playing Wifi games (be) for several hours (playing in the wifi games) or watching interesting TV programs lasting more than two hours(*.However, these gadgets like others that are of the current advances of our time can give to our children educational, and interesting programs (and of interest to them), but (also) there are also bad and senseless programs.

TV programs are entertaining to their public for hours, especially for children, so that if the television is not controlled by their parents, children are capable of either playing Wifi games for several hours or watching interesting TV programs lasting more than two hours. However, these gadgets, like others that are of the current advances of our time, can give to our children educational and interesting programs, but there are also bad and senseless programs.

Good job, May! - sanlee, Dec 12, 2011

thanks sanlee, - maylegoas, Dec 12, 2011