Could you check my proofread English mistakes?

Question

Estoy en desacuerdo, porque los jóvenes de hoy no solo aprenden conocimientos sino que a través del desarrollo de sus capacidades y destrezas tecnológicas, sociales, psicológicas y culturales, pueden enseñar a los mayores no solo lo cognitivo, sino enseñarles también a tener herramientas o recursos para manejar mejor sus relaciones familiares, laborales y sociales.
Por ejemplo la inteligencia emocional es un recurso que los jóvenes pueden utilizar para relacionarse óptimamente con los mayores y ayudarles a comprender que ellos también pueden ser personas proactivas capaces de adecuarse a las nuevas situaciones y exigencias del mundo de hoy.

I disagree, because young people have much to teach, today's youth not only learn knowledge but through the development of their capabilities and technological, social, psychological and cultural skills, can teach not only the cognitive, but also teach them to have tools or resources to better manage their family relationships employment and social. For instance, emotional intelligence is a resource that young people can use to interact optimally with older people; as a result, young people help them understand older people that they can also be proactive people capable of adapting to new situations and demands of today's world.

Thanks

Answer 1

I'm still learning but have posted a suggestion below I'm not sure that I'm quite getting the best translation of the first sentence so I've just done a literal translation. Also, I know that in Spanish sentences can be very long but that first sentence seems too long and unweildy in English - perhaps it could be broken down into a couple of sentences?

I disagree, because the youth of today don't only learn knowledge but through the development of their technological, social, psychological and cultural abilities and skills they can teach older ones not only cognitivive skills but also tools and resources to better manage their family, work and social relationships. For example. emotional intelligence is a resource that youths can employ to relate well with older people and to help them understand that they can be proactive and adapt themselves to new situations and the demands of today's world.

Kiwi_Girl thanks, I would like to know what does the sign do you put above mean? - maylegoas, Dec 5, 2011

the sign? you mean the cartoon? (la viñeta?) - Kiwi-Girl, Dec 5, 2011

Answer 2

Also, just a hint: there are not as many commas used in Spanish. Technically, English requires a comma between the next to last word in a series and the and. Therefore, "...social, psychological, and cultural skills..." Not a big deal, but...

I wouldn't use a comma before an and. - MaryMcc, Dec 5, 2011

It is a debatable rule. I was taught to put the comma before the and, too, but many have been taught the opposite, which makes a lot of sense seeing as how the comma actually represents the word and. - webdunce, Dec 5, 2011

I bow to greater minds... - Pinolero, Dec 6, 2011

I was taught never to put a comma before the word and ;) - Kiwi-Girl, Dec 6, 2011

Now, I didn't say that anyone posting after my comment had a great mind!!! ;]]]] - Pinolero, Dec 7, 2011

Answer 3

I'm afraid the formal teaching of grammar was out of fashion when I was at school, we were just told to use a comma where there would be a natural pause if we were speaking, and a full stop when we began a new thought. I had never heard of subordinating whatsits until I started learning Spanish.

I simply put the comma in because when I read it there is a pause there, the comma signifies a pause.

Answer 4

Una cosa más...no debería haber la coma después de "disagree."

I disagree because the youth... (correcto)

I disagree, because the youth... (incorrecto)

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"Because" es una conjunción que comienza oraciones subordinadas. En inglés, si la oración subordinada sigue la oración principal, no se usa la coma. Pero en el reves sí.

Ejemplos (las principales están en negrita, las subordinadas están en cursiva):

(1) I disagree because young people are awesome in every way imaginable. (sin coma)

(2) Because young people are awesome in every way imaginable, I disagree. (con coma)

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One other thing...there should not be a comma after "disagree."

I disagree because the youth... (correct)

I disagree, because the youth... (incorrect)

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"Because" is a subordinating conjunction, and, in English, if the subordinate clause follows the main clause, then there is no comma, but a comma is used in the reverse situation.

Examples (the principle clauses are in bold, the subordinate ones in italics):

(1) I disagree because young people are awesome in every way imaginable. (no comma)

(2) Because young people are awesome in every way imaginable, I disagree. (comma)

Answer 5

I am at work and nearly finished my break so I have assumed Kiwi has got the translation more or less right. I have just tweaked the English a little. As she says long sentences tend to be frowned on in English so I have divided the first part up a bit.

I hope this helps:-

I disagree, because the youth of today do not only acquire knowledge they develop technological, social, psychological and cultural abilities and skills. In addition to cognitive skills they can teach older people how to use tools and resources to better manage their family, work and social relationships. For example, emotional intelligence is a resource young people can use to relate well to older people and help them understand that they can be proactive and adapt themselves to the new situations and demands of the modern world.