Please, can you review my paragraph
During the presentation you should bear in mind that there are some steps that you need to follow carefully. First of all, breathe for few seconds before your presentation. When you start talking, you should not forget to greet and show a niece smile to your audience; second, introduce the speaker or lecture to your audience; read the tittles and explain your presentation; keep the eye contact with your audience; and, move around the auditorium. Something that psicologists recommend to give some examples during your presentation, use the tools for your presentation; to get heard for everybody is to talk to the person farthest away from you,interact with the audience. Summarize the main points about your topic; however with practice it will be more easier and answer the questions.
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Overall, it looks very good, but here are a few changes, I would make:
During the presentation, keep in mind some steps to follow carefully. First of all. breathe for a few seconds before your presentation. When you start talking, don't forget to greet and give your audience a nice smile. Second, introduce yourself to your audience. Then, read the titles and explain your presentation, moving around the auditorium and always keeping eye contact with your audience. To better appeal to your audience, something psychologists recommend is giving some examples and using tools or props during your presentation. To make sure everybody can hear, talk to the person farthest away from you. Summarize the main points about your topic...
The end here is a little is a little odd. I would suggest you try to rearrange it, so it is clearer.
Mostly, what I did here was rearrange the sentences, so they were a little clearer and more composed. I also threw in a couple transition words and phrases like "then". These help to make your writing flow more smoothly.
Anyway, hope that helped! =)
During the presentation you should bear in mind that there are some steps that you need to follow carefully. First of all, breathe for A few seconds before your presentation. When you start talking, you should not forget to greet and show a niece smile to your audience; second, introduce the speaker or lectureR to your audience; read the tittles and explain your presentation; keep the eye contact (maintain eye contact) with your audience; and, move around the auditorium. Something that psicologists// psychologists recommend IS to give some examples during your presentation, use the tools for your presentation; to get heard for everybody (to be audible to everyone ) is to talk to the person farthest away from you ; interact with the audience. Summarize / summarise the main points about your topic; however with practice it will be more easier and answer the questions.// easier to answer ??
Hello ! very good paragraph in english - the only mistakes you make are very small, also i have included ''maintain eye contact '' for you , as this is the common phrasal verb for this kind of context. Very good english - good stuff! george
First of all, breathe for A few seconds...show a NICE smile .....introduce the speaker or lecturER.....read the TITLES.....keep eye contact (no "the" required).....PSYCHOLOGISTS recommend IS to give.....to BE heard BY everybody YOU SHOULD talk to the person farthest away from you. Interact with the audience. Summarize the main points of your topic and then answer any questions. With practice it will be easier.
I'm not sure what you are trying to convey in the statement "use the tools for your presentation". Please explain, if you can and I will try to help you.
