Please, could you proofread my mistakes? in my Essay ?
Please, could you proofread my English mistakes?
Stress is a universal phenomenon that is considered to be disease of the century. It is not surprising therefore that social scientist are studying more and more about its causes. According to Hans Selye, “Stress the concept dates back to the 1930s.” In addition, stress is defined as the body’s response to an external condition that disrupt’s a person’s emotional equilibrium; therefore, several circumstances are unconsciously perceived as threats. However, we can combat stress and improve our living condition.
Recent research reveals that one of the causes of stress among many women is the separation or death of their husbands while their children were young. Consequently, they had to take over the parenting.
Another cause of stress may be that these women do not have enough money to face all of their kids’ problems; thus, they were obligated to work and study to improve themselves and get better jobs; hence, they arrived late getting home and discover that their kids had been all the day playing or are watching TV without to study; due to fact, they fell themselves unable to raise and educate to their children personally.
However, stress is not always bad. In fact, some stress is good. Most of women cannot do bring up their children. Without the stress of reaching the goal, most of them would not be able professionals get their children. On the other hand, sometimes is good a little of stress to finish our project.
While is true that most of us suffer of stress, also is true that they can to reduce the stress with some strategies such as: exercise, meditate, set realistic goals at home and at work, try to see change as a positive challenge, not a threat, sleep good. In addition, there are much people that suffer stress in the work, also there are some strategies to reduce the stress such as: Drink plenty of water during the day and avoid too much caffeine. Do not skip meals and keep healthy snacks in your desk or dried fruits (raisins), nut and unsalted peanuts, whole grain cereal, granola types, crackers. Take frequent vacations than 5 minutes, closing the door of his office, and take a few minutes doing stretching, listening to soothing music.
To sum up, stress is the disease of the century, and most of us suffer it with their terrible consequences. However, every day more and more health professionals are recognizing the benefits of meditation, and we can improve our quality of live by good meditation having to God for first point, with a good alimentation, and having a health live with our family.
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Hi May, I didn't have much time to look at this, but this is a start. Maybe later I can try to explain a few things. 
J
Stress is a universal phenomenon that is considered to be the disease of the century. It is not surprising therefore that social scientists are studying more and more about its causes. According to Hans Selye, “The concept of stress dates back to the 1930's.” In addition, stress is defined as the body’s response to an external condition that disrupts a person’s emotional equilibrium, wherein several circumstances are unconsciously perceived as threats. However, we can combat stress and improve our living condition.
Recent research reveals that one of the causes of stress among many women is the separation or death of their husbands while their children were young. Consequently, they had to take over the parenting.
Another cause of stress may be that these women did not have enough money to face all of their childrens’ ("kids" is too informal in this essay) problems**. Thus, they were obligated to work and study to improve themselves and get better jobs.** Perhaps they arrived late getting home only to discover that their children had been playing or watching TV all day,without studying. As a result, they were unable to raise and educate their children personally.
However, stress is not always bad. In fact, some stress is good. Most women cannot bring up their children (or, cannot devote themselves to raising their children) without encountering some stress. Without the stress of reaching a (job-related) goal, most of them would not be able professionals get their children. (I am not sure what you mean by this sentence, but it doesn't work!) On the other hand, sometimes a little stress is good, to motivate us to finish our project.
While it is true that most of us suffer from stress, it is also true that we can do things to reduce this stress with some strategies such as: exercising, meditating, setting realistic goals at home and at work, trying to see change as a positive challenge, not a threat, and sleeping well. In addition, there are many people that suffer from stress in their work. Also, there are some strategies to reduce stress such as: drinking plenty of water during the day, and avoiding too much caffeine. Do not skip meals and keep healthy snacks in your desk, such as dried fruits (raisins), nut and unsalted peanuts, whole grain cereal, kinds of granola, and crackers. Take frequent breaks longer than 5 minutes - close the door to your office, and take a few minutes to do some stretching, and perhaps listen to soothing music.
To sum up, stress is the disease of the century, and most of us suffer from it. However, every day more and more health professionals are recognizing the benefits of meditation, and we can improve our quality of lives through good meditation, trusting in God (??), eating well, and having a healthy life with our family.
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Stress is a universal phenomenon that is considered to be the disease of the century. It is not surprising therefore that social scientists are studying more and more about its causes. According to Hans Selye, “Stress, the concept dates back to the 1930's.” In addition, stress is defined as the body’s response to an external condition that disrupts a person's emotional equilibrium; therefore, several circumstances are unconsciously perceived as threats. However, we can combat stress and improve our living conditions.
Recent research reveals that one of the causes of stress among many women is the separation from or death of their husbands while their children are young. Consequently, they had to take over the parenting.
Another cause of stress may be that these women do not have enough money to face all of their kids’ problems; thus, they were obligated to work and study in order to further themselves and get better jobs. Hence, they arrive late at home and discover that their kids have been playing all day or watching TV without studying due to the fact that they themselves were unable to raise and educate their children personally.
However, stress is not always bad. In fact, some stress is good. Most women cannot bring up their children. Without the stress of reaching their goals, most of them would not be earning professionals to provide for their children. Thus, sometimes a little stress is good to accomplish our goals.
While it is true that most of us suffer from stress, it is also true that they can reduce stress with some strategies such as: exercising; meditating; realistic goal-setting at home and at work; trying to see change as a positive challenge, not as a threat; and having good sleeping patterns. In addition, there are many people that suffer from stress at work, where there are also some strategies to reduce stress like: drinking plenty of water during the day and avoiding too much caffeine; not skipping meals and keeping healthy snacks such as dried fruits (raisins), nuts and unsalted peanuts, whole grain cereal, granola and crackers at your desk; taking frequent five-minute breaks; closing the office door; taking a few minutes to do some stretching; and listening to soothing music.
To sum up, stress is the disease of the century and most of us suffer from it. However, every day more and more health professionals are recognizing the benefits of meditation and that we can improve our quality of life through good meditation oriented towards God, with a good diet, and having a healthy family.
Take frequent vacations than 5 minutes, closing the door of his office,
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